Sara didn't get me a key chain,
on her cruise to the carribean.
I was so mad,
and I bet she was glad.
"Sorry they were cheap,
and plus you are such a freak."
Oh Sara, Oh Sara,
you didn't get me a key chain.
OH Sara, Oh Sara,
How can you be so lame.
While you were on vaction,
with your stupid sun tan lotion.
I was stuck in school,
and man that wasnt cool.
Running 20 mile laps,
without a single nap.
Oh Sara, Oh Sara,
you didn't get me a key chain.
Oh Sara, Oh Sara,
how can you be so lame.
"To make it up to you, you can have a shell!"
Dude, Does it have a key or a chain?
Will it ever be the same?!?!
I BET NOT!
OH Sara, Oh Sara,
you didnt get me a key chain
OH Sara, Oh Sara
how can you be so lame.
((hum.....hum......)
OH Sara.....
Author notes
This is about my friend Sara, who goes on here and how she didnt get me a key chain. I know that not all of the ryhmes work but TOO BAD!!!
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I was looking at her back pack and SHE got herself a keychain and I was like why didnt you get one!!!! You said there werent any good ones
"OH well I dont like it when someone has the same shirt or whatever as me.!!!"
BLAH!!!
I specifically asked for a keychain before she went on her trip, but NOOOOO, no even a post card
**PS**
Im not THAT mad at her but, still! 
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First line, I believe, the comma at the end isn't needed since the second line is connected to it with the use of the word "on".
"OH Sara, Oh Sara,
How can you be so lame."
First line, going with the previous two, "OH" would be better as "Oh". Or, going with the repetion of the verse at the end, the previous one should be "OH". Second line, if this is a question, should not there be a question mark at the end of the line?
"While you were on vaction,"
"vaction" would be "vacation", and I believe the comma isn't needed at the end of the line.
"and man that wasnt cool."
"wasnt" should have the apostrophe in it "wasn't".
"((hum.....hum......)"
Should be an additional ")" at the end, as there is in the beginning.
A nice lyrical piece.
-Nam
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UGG! How dare sara!
!!!!Any way, I'm glad some of the rhymes don't work. It's very original!
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