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And he sighs ever on...

Missing image

 

 

 

 

 

His brow truly burns now,

as saliva seeks

to paint tainted lips

and guilt applies itself

to his ribcage.

 

He treads through

precarious thoughts,

slaughtering shames

with untamed realities

 

and smoke rises

through eyes

of many men.

 

His name is a necklace

of hate,

that forms fate

around his throat

and he prays

for this day to devour him--

 

he's a broken man

who, too late

learns repentance,

struggling through one winter,

sensing revenge

up several sleeves

 

and he grieves

for lost chances

and mistakes...

 

and romance

 

and those few things

that matter,

whether wealthy

 

or not.

 

He's now first in the line,

in the night,

at the end

 

without might's miracles

or monetary gains;

 

so he stores sores away,

as secrets

drift to sleep,

to keep backs from knowing

of the nightmares

mind keeps.

 

He's obliged to kneel freely-

 

without row

or remorse,

yet the source of his soul

grabs tight to his pride

 

and so...there he stays,

as breath grows ever old

along sixty-eight shades

of solitary life.

 

Such strife kisses his lids,

while he sighs one last time

as fate forms his farewells...

 

and carries him home.

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Picture Credit::: Fabian Perez
Picture Link ::: http://www.blackpearlfineart.com/images/FABIANUNTITLED2_mor.jpg


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  • Oh my... Such a sad and powerful pen you have shown us here!!!! I was completly captivated with each line. Your wording is outstanding and you chose such a wonderful picture.

    Thank you so much for entering my contest.


    Delila


  • Rose Angel gold member
    March 5

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    Such an original deep thoughtful and sad write on the prompt...But so accurate as I see regret written on his brow...Oh, so wonderful a write...I am sure the painter would like your interpretation and poem as we too do!

  • This moves with such beautiful rhythm captured by your carefully placed internal rhyme.
    Excellent take on this image - deep and quite inspiring.
    A pleasure to read and enjoy. ~Pamela


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    February 21

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    I couldn't stop reading this. It really enthralled me. Jsut brilliant!
    Best wishes in the contest.
    Gaylene


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    February 18

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    What a wonderful write! You have penned a sad tale that really does capture the painting! I was entranced!


  • Nom de Plume
    February 18

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    definitely a great piece... love it... everyone has a story to tell dont they Small typo, untame should it be untamed
    wish you luck but you dont need it


    • Laura Lamarca gold member
      February 18
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      I picked that up twice and didn't correct it...what an ass! Thank you


  • hearts blossoms
    February 17

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    a brilliant story filled poem, an analouge of words as if listening to a read along story, brilliant thoughts to come from the picture, giving depth and detail of the man for whom i had to feel such pity and at the end a relife as his end came and maybe gave him his peace
    absolutley brilliant friend
    your work astounds me from when i was on here before till now your improvement is remarkable
    much love to you
    abigail xxxxx


  • Peteskid gold member
    February 16

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    Very well done, strong narration, omniscient discourse laying a path for the reader and so many incisive views of a life...PK


  • Unbreakable3
    February 16

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    I like this it makes oyu sad but hopeful almost... its very touchign... very creative idea... you must have a wonderful imaginitive mind...

    Blessings

    Unbreakable...<


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    February 16

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    this is a beautiful write from you and made me very happy to have read it today. i wish you well in this contest that you have entered and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    February 16

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    Excellent take on the picture prompt, my friend
    A powerful, descriptive piece this is!
    I wish you the very best in this contest and in all your writing endeavors!


  • Never Fall in Love
    February 16
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    wonderful

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