His wings white and flawless in appearance
Hers black and torn
Though separate on the outside on the inside they are but one
His touch is warm and hers is cold
When life's kiss plays upon them time stands still
Hearts playing a symphony of emotions that no one knows
No words are needed for their hearts beat as one
With each other the stream of life will run
But without each other's embrace life would cease to exist
Now I ask you
Is it love or is it blasphemy...
Author notes
Option 1 number 5: I wrote about a kind of spiritual twist on a Romeo and Juliet Valentines Day. An angel falls in love with a demon and it is your judgement to decide whether it is love or blashphemy. Hope you enjoyed it!!!
A contest entry
- February New Members Contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended March 4, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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So, you'd totally be the woman in this.
Not 'cause you're a lady *cough* but because you have...
Erm, black wings, like she does.
Heheheheeee.
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This is very good. I like the comparisons in the piece. (Hot and cold) Very talented, obviously. Thanks for sharing and keep up the greatness. Best wishes to you.
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Hello bittersweet,
You had me until I read the authors notes. I think that your poem was good.. and would be better if you ended it with the line that starts with, "but without each other's embrace".....
Criss
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This is very pretty. Words are selected that give it balance. Nothing too fluffy, but honest and soft.
*Suggestion*
I would curtail the title.
Example: " Is it Love or Blasphemy" Or even,
"Love or Blasphemy". this will allow it to
be said with just a few more words at the ending.
A little tweaking would polish this one. Otherwise,
a good contender. Very nice.
Thank you for entering ! Warmly, CookieZeal
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An interesting little twist in the contest. Nicely done. I have seen a picture that would go well with your words here... though you have painted a vivid enough image with your lines.
Keep writing on and enjoy the site.
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I love the concept of this, but the poem feels unfinished to me. I'd love to see you expand upon it. Good luck.
♥
Shawna
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the last line ties the story together very well...a beautiful write!!
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Hi Grafton
This is a good poem i like the last lines the best makes the reader stop and think
Thank you for entering the contest
Barbara
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This is indeed written well, but to go with the rules, it would be nice if you could add the Option u chose to write about in your authors comments.
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Beautiful!
Ah, the almighty Nate Grafton!
Hurrah! Hurrah!
I really, really love this poem. Not to mention, blasphemy is one of my most favorite words!
I think it's blasphemous love
Hahaha.
Bravo, my Darling
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A fantastic write. The imagery is beautiful. How two people can become one when they are in love. Thank you for sharing this with us. Best of luck in your contest.
Sarah
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