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Dragon's Tale

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It sailed the skies in truest hue,
its breath of fire for all to view.
Its lordship claimed o’er sky and land,
and conquered foes on every hand.

Along one day at dawn’s first light,
there came from east a fearsome sight.
With gruesome teeth and black veneer,
they clashed and gnashed till end was near.
But end the fight would kill them both,
Instead, best friends they swore in oath.


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I think this is the 25th

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Iambic tetrameter

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Comments

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  • MoonStarRaven
    June 2

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    What a lovely poem and an enjoyable read this was! I loved the flow and rhyme it has as well as the entertaining tale!


  • PurpleSky
    June 2

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    cool ending and I love dragons so this was a fun read for me. I loved your rhyme it was flawless. Thank you so much for taking the time to enter my contest and best wishes to you!
    huggles
    Lena


  • Ice Queen
    May 7

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    This is amazing. I love dragon's. Good job!


  • Ithica silver member
    April 10

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    I know nothing of iambic tetrameter but I LOVE dragons and tales with happy ending!!! Especially the kind with the most unlikely alliances... which says to me anything is truly possible...


  • Riftkin gold member
    March 1
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    Such a tale of dragons.. They are one of my favorite things. love the ending.


  • BearWoman gold member
    February 28

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    I like it!

    I don’t know the style, though it "feels" right to me. I like the story you created—foes that would mutually die in mortal combat, instead choose to become friends. I personally would prefer a longer story—how the dragon flew in the light of the moon—then dawn arises—then the peril/challenge—then the resolution, but that’s just me!! Nice poem. One minor suggestion for a tweak: S1, L4 start with "It" to parallel the rest of the stanza.

    • Nickelspring gold member
      February 28

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      Thanks for the great comment- I agree, it needs expansion, maybe one day.
      I like the suggested tweak- I'll play around with it and see.
      Thanks again for stopping by.
      KW~


  • Nymphetemine
    February 26

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    I liked the flow of your write. I was expecting a different ending so the end was a surprise.!!lol
    Good luck with your writing.
    Love and Light AngelofLight xx


    • Nickelspring gold member
      February 26
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      Thank you so much! I appreciate your visit and reading my little piece
      KW~


  • Nickelspring gold member
    February 16
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    Thank you insanejoe! I'll have a look
    KW~


  • Insane-Joe
    February 16

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    WOW!

    I love tales about dragons and this poem was really well done...and in iambic pantameter too...amazing! plz if u cud return the favor and review my poetry!

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