Promised the world
Only to get an atlas
Was my ultimate fate, alas
As our future unfurled
Promised a dream
Only to get a nightmare
Full of despair
Irony in the extreme
Promised your hand
Only to get your hate
And an elusive soul mate
I just don’t understand
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Author notes
Promised the world only to get an atlas was...
Finish this line in 40 words or less
A contest entry
- Swift This Line... by Ken-Maverick.
900 points, ended February 26, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Excellent. So often the world promises us so much, only to let us down with second best. I like your rhyme scheme - hard to do in 40 words exactly. You'll get the world eventually, dinna fash.
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Brilliant piece of poetry here
and may i say... very cleverly penned, well done
All the best to you in the contest
Ken -
Co-judged!!!
Excellent rhyme here.
Your words are effective and they show the way in which we can expect to get something and then just not find it the way you expected.
Best to you in the contest
Shari
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I've been through this with so many stupid little girls.
"Promised your hand
Only to get your hate
And an elusive soul mate
I just don’t understand"
That how you know they aren't your soul mate...feelings like that.
I can totally relate to this one. -
nicely done .. u incoporated the prompt seamlessly and definately found the vibe.
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Excellent Rhyme scheme to finish the line--very difficult to achieve, but you have mastered it.
Well Done & Best of Luck in the contest!
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