Sliding driving forcing teaching
misanthropic half cut bodies
intertwining losing sense
purpose vanished likened to pointed wax
ending together isolated
closed mouths no mouths to slither
lips apart breasts crucified united hands
floating systemic intrepid
undaunted time floating encapsulated
water running unashamed
music bent twisted annihilated
mountains caught in moorish embrace
skeleton fields planted incongrous living beasts
man born in dying beasts pinned to hope
let faceless minions explode
St John's Christ looks down to endless seas
deviation rifles through cataclysmic doom
the mask of time dies twisted.
A contest entry
- Dream Brother (Contest) by just mercedes.
2000 points, ended March 2, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Feel free.
Comments
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yes, I do agree very interesting picture. Your imagery is as usual dead one. I had to laugh at some of your comments on this one. Some very interesting ones here. Loved reading your words as usual. Thanks for sharing this with us.
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Once one views the picture prompt for this it begins to make sense. Very surreal indeed.
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Thanks so much for your surreal remarks. Yes, I agree with you the picture makes the collapsing moustache -- closer to reality (LOL)
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I have to say I was a bit lost in this one. To many big words for me with unknown meanings which I had to go look up in the dictionary to read so yeah this one kind of lost on me. Thank you for sharing this.
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Thank you for this entry in the contest. I really like the images you transferred from the video to the page, and the enigmatic twist given the moustache.
I love the second line, the first had too may -ings for me. The layering of glimpses of paintings, or details from paintings, moves the reader through the poem along with the growing pessimism. Great final line.
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hmmmm I must think about this one for a bit. Do they both have a moustache ... are the mountains hard, firm breasts? geee my mind runs amuck.
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Donald,will you please send me the decoder dear one =)
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Brother... that's quite a dream!
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Very worthy poem on the subject !
And a very worthy poem for someone calling themselves "quantumsurveyor"!
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