When you look deep
Into my blue eyes
Do you see the pain,
The pain that screams
From deep within the
Hollow shell that once
Was my heart, but now
Resides in a lonely tomb
Of broken promises and
Half heart attempts of
Love gone dreadfully wrong
Author notes
Written for the contest prompt. When I saw this prompt, it brought out a lot of words all at once and originally I was going to write a poem much longer than 30-50 words, but the contest stated 30-50 words so I controlled myself, pulled my thoughts together and let this meaningful real emotional poem come to life. This is how I feel right now, I'm still a hollow shell inside, so this prompt really helped me write about it. Thanks
Image from: http://i46.photobucket.com/albums/f101/lisa4517/small843053.jpg
A contest entry
- Behind Blue Eyes [Prompt] by Beautiful-N-Broken.
700 points, ended February 17, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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sad
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outstanding
omg this poem is so full of emotion, its so sad. you wrote this very well. i know this may be bad right now for you but you are so strong and can get through it. you have amazing talent that can take you so far..i really enjoyed reading it.
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Well, I am so happy that you entered. This is an amazing write and so easy to read and relate to. Thanks so much for entering and good luck in the contest.
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Truly sad and I know it depicts part of what you're going through in your own life (which is no picnic). Good luck in the contest and other things.
Ted E
PS: I love the heart as her pupil in the picture
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