My heart as soft as the fur of his love.
I cushion in his heart
Can a pond leave waves?
as he turns my heart to faint
like a strand of golden amber hair
he tints it there like that of summer love
summer love is this the summer song
my summer love?
As my feelings drip it bother my inside
as if I am sitting upon field of grass
for hours long thread my fingers there
but my body may be allergic to
this summer grass though looks goods
leaves picnic love sharing happiness
are we hear on summer field?
Upon the sea something pretty I see
must I chase cease it over hear.
Oh come here bring those lips to me,
my darling.
My singing have grown a bundles
of roses on his ears
roses I have never seen.
Have you seen a blue singing rose?
I attach it upon his ears like so
and he attaches on mine.
for everday he adds a new rose
to my precious feild
which add more scent to the calm air
We don’t have to make tambourines
and what have you for our love flows
where we can dance through a kiss.
It sings like this lala in his lips.
My love puts my heart to sleep
with the candence from his heartbeat.
that comes too me as my heart sways
“What peace ah?
Romantic let us think deep
Like anything
Will this pond leave waves?"
A contest entry
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Gold trophy winner
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I like that it becomes slightly nonsensical and whimsical in parts, almost as if a thought dropped off in the middle, the way thoughts do at the press of our lover's lips. The tempo of this was pleasant and reverbated sweetly in my heart. Exquisite!
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While I was not able to follow your poem, I see it won both a Gold and a Silver Trophy and got some good comments. Good for you! Thank you for entering my contest.
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Very lovely...flowing thoughts, beautiful imagery, and a very nice subject! Nicely written, and thanks for entering the contest!
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Lovely piece with great imagery and metaphors. Nicely done! Thanks for entering my contest. Good luck. It’s an honor to have you show your work here!
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WAY too long.
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This is a great write for this contest thank you very much for taking the time to enter my contest best wishes always be well.
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