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winter months

The creatures runs slyly through the field of white
squirrels looking for acorns in mornings light
rabbits sleeping calmly through night
a bear walking methodically towards the den
her cubs close behind hoping to find a hen

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  • poetry1128
    February 15

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    nice job

    I do like your poems, but have you considered expanding your boundaries in to other things, besides nature? if you revised the last line i think it would be even better