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My Amaranth Rose (A Ballade)

I love it when your heart beats next to mine
hearts whisper to each other I love you.
Sharing emotions that words can't define
just knowing this beautiful love is true.
Inside my soul something so precious grew
when my undying devotion you chose.
Rare and elusive as a rose of blue,
your tender love is my amaranth rose.

The taste of your kiss is sweeter than wine,
perhaps the best part of each rendezvous.
Your warm embrace sends shivers down my spine,
amazing sensations rushing straight through.
I drown in the passionate things you do
lost together in our romantic throes
every kiss, every caress feels so new.
Your tender love is my amaranth rose.

Wrapped together our hearts and souls entwine
and I can't help falling deeper into
the wonders of your heart, that is my shrine.
Across the canvas of my heart you drew
a portrait of love that spans every hue.
Such perfectly created mementos
designed from your love for my soul to view.
Your tender love is my amaranth rose.

Soft petals glisten with the morning dew
where my love for you eternally grows
in a garden of love that blooms for two,
your tender love is my amaranth rose. 

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Form is called a ballade and can be found at shadowpoetry.com

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  • Diminished Capacity gold member
    November 14, 2009

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    This is such a loving piece. I do love the repeat of the ending sentence. The form itself is beautiful, but brilliant writes like this bring the form to life. Wonderful job.


  • Cynthia Gaines
    February 20, 2009

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    Beautifully Sensual & Romantic!!

    Thank you for your wonderful Valentine's Day entry in my contest!! I'm wishing you all the best!! Peace, xx Cyn


  • memoriesofyou
    February 16, 2009

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    Love it!!

    I love how you repeat the same sentence at the end. Very beautiful write.
    Inside my soul something so precious grew
    when my undying devotion you chose.

    That's amazingly written, you have a 'knack' for this!


  • StormyDawn
    February 16, 2009

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    Absolutly beautiful. I had to say, I had no one favorite part, because I liked the whole things. Very good write.

  • TheRose
    February 16, 2009

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    Lovely piece - I enjoyed the similies too. Wondering if you do mean "Illusive" or "Elusive" - as a type of blue rose was developed in 2004 using genetic engineering.

  • HollyLouise
    February 16, 2009

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    this is rich with love and passion. It is beautifully written, and i love the similes used, also your descriptions make the poem have depth to it.

    Holly.


  • Gabreon
    February 16, 2009

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    Very nice, captivating poem. The emotion present in the diction and imagery of the poem is powerful and rich. You write very well in the tone of love and with strong passion, comes through effectively.

    Great poem, and I just have a couple suggestions for revision:
    Line 7: "illusive"...I think you mean "elusive"

    Also, I would encourage you to tighten up the structure a bit. There are points in the poem where the rhyme scheme seems forced or the lines seem to go on too long, perhaps there are ways you can rephrase those lines to keep the rhyme scheme, but enhance the flow of the poem?

    "Your warm embrace sends shivers down my spine,"

    That line is an example. It seems just a couple syllables too long to fit in the rhythm and structure of the poem.

    Anyway, great work, and thank you. It was an enjoyable poem to read!

  • DreamIlluminator
    February 15, 2009

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    Amazing. This describes what it's like to be with the one I love. This says what I never could. Fantastic work.


  • kooleyes
    February 15, 2009

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    Beautiful

    this poem is the type that would make anyone want to be in love. Your feeling come through loud and clear.Your words pull me in making me want that feeling if only for a breif moment. Thanks you for the read and keep on writing.


  • Unbreakable3
    February 15, 2009
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    Beauty

    This poem somethign abotu pushes my heart into a lighter area filled with hope and dreams.. a place my heart hasn't been in a whiel thank you! I really love your work the rhymign is increadable the stanzas were placed nicley and I htink everythig abotu it was simply superb!!! Thank you!!!

    Amazing work...

    God Bless You

    -Unbreakable... <3

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