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shhh shhh.

shhh shhh--
only the sea
talking





Andrew Hide
22~02~2004

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Written February 22nd, 2004

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  • myrataal silver member
    February 26, 2004
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    I love your recent work even more, Andrew! This poem was given excellent dimension by the word "only" - it is a paradox with the mighty waves and vastness of the ocea ... Absolutely brilliant ...

    Hugs.

    Myra


  • BillS2
    February 25, 2004
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    Excellent

    Hi Andrew:
    That is really a very compact, yet a sensory write as it incorporates so many senses in those few words. I'm sure the background has something to do with it, but the words give sight,sound and almost a sense of touch to this verse. Thanks for this wonderful write. Bill


  • rhiannon 11
    February 25, 2004
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    perfection in a little package

    So lucid, so free...hushed the sea

    rhi (Sarah)


  • Emmerson
    February 24, 2004
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    Ahh I love the sea and you are right it is full of blankets of blue and pillows of shuushh.

    Lovely write Mr Hide.

  • squeakybat
    February 23, 2004
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    shhhhh

    short and to the point. i like it. it makes you stop and think about the quiet waves of the sea splashing. it contains good imagery.


  • Ladybug
    February 22, 2004
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    the sea does sing it's own melody for certain!
    great haiku you have painted.

    :0
    Tamara

  • Seether
    February 22, 2004
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    like the whispers of the sea calling gently within a shell


    you echo this beautifully Sir Hide


  • February 22, 2004
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    This one leaves you with a peaceful feeling..I like the way you humanized the sound of the sea..very nice.


  • SusanL
    February 22, 2004
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    It must be a calmer sea you see... cool, susan


  • DougMcCue
    February 22, 2004
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    inland
    out of sight
    waves crash
    Edited on Feb 22, 3:13 p.m. because ''.


  • February 22, 2004
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    IT WAS COOL

  • Billbard silver member
    February 22, 2004
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    Gently waving too.
    Edited on Feb 22, 1:46 p.m. because ''.

  • philophant
    February 22, 2004
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    perfect

    (Agrees with Peacelink.)

  • Pari Ali
    February 22, 2004
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    shhh dont say a word
    lets listen in silence

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