gentle words felt as soothing balm
stroking softly serene as sincerity's song
magical music made muscles muted
igniting imaginations illusive
his human harmony held her heavenly
like a palaced princess precisely placed
looking past her purse pent prison
relinquishing fantasy to reality's realm
delicately delighted opening destiny's door
handing her corroded key to his heart
knowing knowledge needs no words
as ardor has its own silent symphony
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I like the choice of consonance here.In the first stanza it works somehow lovingly, the rhythm invoked is that of gentle, undulating waves. In the second stanza it somehow changes from the stroking waves into a series of short stops, invoked by the p sounds. in the third I think the stress is more evident as a resolution to step into a new realm. The contrast between purse pent prison and the act of opening the door with a corroded key is remarkable. It creates a future laden with a greater knowledge of one's soul. Well done and congrats!
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THANK YOU FOR THE INDEPTH ANALYSIS OF MY POEM. I HIGHLY APPRECIATE IT.
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Beautiful choice of words........excellent imagery.........way to go.........all the best!!
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What a wonderful write!
"handing her corroded key to his heart"
love the meaning translated through this line.
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i loved this. the alliteration works so well.
the poem is very beautiful and brings the reader
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out of words.....delightful
but the poem has captured all the beautiful feelings that were meant to be.......great write again.....may b ur best so far.........cheers -
I loved how you added alliteration.. I have never been able to put alliteration into anythignwiothout it soundign cheesy!!! This is beautiful! I love music and this really is truley good!!! I like how you didnt capitilize anythign... beutiful work!!!
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I don't think any adjective, word, compliment might be good enough to describe this poem... You showed an breathtaking image of love, the sweetness of love's symphony.the alliteration was wonderful and the words know how to make their way right to my heart.
great work
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amazing use of alliteration, brilliantly done. it flows really well, and is overall an amazing poem. keep up the great work, thanks for sharing this!
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love does indeed beat to its own rythm, lovely write... liking the alliteration. good luck
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