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[trying to] let go.

i wear bows with polka dots
in my hair because lately i'm
the only one who confirms
that i am at least pretty.

but i miss when you used to say i was beautiful
[i miss being gorgeous]
--

you tell me words laced in
diamonds that keep pulling me
closer to you when i need to
push you away. 

i love you's draped in perfection echo against
my eardrums
--

pieces of me are stuck behind
your fingernails, and remnants
of you are trapped behind the irises
of my eyes; we've officially lost
ourselves in each other.

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this is crap

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  • whiterabbit.
    May 7, 2009

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    The writing here is so beautiful. The descriptions add so much to the reality in this piece. I love it.

    but i miss when you used to say i was beautiful
    [i miss being gorgeous]
    ^^^^^Amazing doll.

    ♥


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    April 4, 2009

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    What?! Are you serious? Crap?
    This is a terrific prose piece

    The combination of your well penned imagery and your raw emotion have made a terrific read here. Great work


  • Hope Angel silver member
    March 6, 2009

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    This isn't crap, it's good. I loved the way you described what you are feeling. Hope it get's better
    Thanks for entering


  • Kiss the girl--x
    February 17, 2009

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    this is beautiful.
    not crap.

    like amazing. like..you should be proud of yourself allll at the same time for writing something amazing.

    i can't give you my favourite lines, the whole thing would be pasted here, but i'm bookmarking it

    ♥


  • novacaine.
    February 17, 2009

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    it's not crap.
    it's really beautiful actually.
    and i like it a lot.
    especially this part..
    "i love you's draped in perfection echo against
    my eardrums"


  • my.stars.dont.shine
    February 15, 2009

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    It seems like everyone enters and says it sucks, but none of the entries really suck. This doesnt suck.

    I like where you took the prompt, put feelings into it. Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • yellow blue bus gold member
    February 15, 2009

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    definitely not crap!
    this was beautiful.
    i love it.
    the imagery is so amazing. i love the way you wrote this.

    i love you's draped in perfection echo against
    my eardrums
    ---
    thats actually brilliant.
    and i love the last stanza as well.

    best of luck in the contest

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