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Fatal Flaw

There's really nothing quite so nice,
As being kissed by lips of ice.
Unless it's hugging my best pal,
As he bears his teeth, and growls.

Edward will always be my guy,
because he taught me how to fly.
Jacob will always be my friend,
though he abhors the scent of my skin.

Heck, it doesn't even bother me,
that while I'm dining at KFC,
and looking over my shoulder for the Volturi,
Ed's sucking the life out of poor Bambi.

Someday when my wish comes true,
my skin will also be pale blue.
I'll go out hunting with the Cullen crew,
and get my own special "venison stew."

I guess some things are meant to be,
like Edward, Carlisle, Esme, and me,
except for that gal Rosalie,
who cannot stand the sight of me.

This story only has one fatal flaw;
My best friend may become my son-in-law!

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Option #3 Twilight poem

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  • XxLoverOfDarknessxX
    April 17

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    OMG!!! this is awesome!! great work! i absolutely loved it! the emotions jumped out at me; i loved "I guess some things are meant to be,
    like Edward, Carlisle, Esme, and me,
    except for that gal Rosalie,
    who cannot stand the sight of me."
    that was funny! thank you for entering my contest and good luck! keep up the good work!


  • SingMeToSleep
    March 2

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    Haha. Wow. I absolutely loved this. It was extremely well written and very funny.

    Thank you for entering and good luck.

    -SingMeToSleep-


  • YouWillBeLoved
    February 28

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    Awesome

    In some off way the style reminds me of a poem equivalent those alternative bands that words things so straight forward in the most unique way in thier songs(i.e. CIWWAF, The rocket summer etc.) Sorry about the odd comment but I Love it!


  • xPink-Lotusx
    February 16

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    I loved it!

    I love it as it is actually. Very humorous, and sticking to the story. Very good write. I really did enjoy this. Funny thing, I found this after watching a spoof trailer on youtube of twilight. It made me giggle, good write.

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