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neon catarack

Bitting Sorrow
sinking slowly
with bitter taste
as the heavens dip deep
into the fragile, whaling womb

the crawling sand inches it's way
along-side would-be dreams
the wind chokes the spirit
and the dust swallows bone

the toungh is dry
perpetualy
as it thirsts for the replineshing rain

with fire and rage
is rocked the cradle

far below the dark , endless sky.

this one is a little tentative.I may edit it.

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  • Girl-Interrupted gold member
    February 15, 2009
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    Very descriptive.... the imagery is awesome...love the second stanza in particular..

    becca