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maybe, just maybe

a crumbling wall
one lone brick falls
shattering the already fragile mask
and you crumble
turning to a pile of smoking rubble
and maybe we'll stick a sign here
and turn you into a historic ruin


barely beating
appearing black as coal
your heart slowly freezes
and ceases to love
and maybe we'll give you a gravestone
and leave you to rest in peace


guns firing from both side
words used as bullets
and broken promises the bombshells
and maybe its no ones fault
and maybe we'll stick a rude cross in the ground
and say this is where you fell

or maybe, just maybe
you'll block the malicious whispers
and rid yourself of doubts
and we can put you back together brick by brick
unfreeze your most vital organ
and stop this internal war

maybe just maybe
it'll all be okay

or maybe, just maybe
you'll lay down and die
and we'll be forced to mourn you

Author notes

written again to Vallash, sorry I can't write anything better. This kinda came from the reply I just wrote to you.

erm I guess its also written to my real life brother.

and Charley if he's willing to be connected to something thats as bad as this poem

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  • MasterFoxFang
    March 28, 2009

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    Good

    nice rhyme i love this another really great one good job i love this part


    barely beating
    appearing black as coal
    your heart slowly freezes
    and ceases to love
    and maybe we'll give you a gravestone
    and leave you to rest in peace


    guns firing from both side
    words used as bullets
    and broken promises the bombshells
    and maybe its no ones fault
    and maybe we'll stick a rude cross in the ground
    and say this is where you fell

    nice write love it


  • MYsecondchance gold member
    March 17, 2009

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    this is awesome, this deffinitly doesn't suck.
    don't bash your self.
    You know how write, but you should before conscience of capitalizing letters, it takes away from a great poem.


  • Beauty Of Silence
    February 16, 2009

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    WHOA! this is incredibly amaizing. its an outstanding piece of writing. love the emotions that u put into this. very thoughtful and meaningful. keep writing! love ya!


  • Rane
    February 15, 2009

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    I've not had a poem written for me before i don't think. It's really well written too, i like the repetition of "maybe, just maybe". That plus the theme of the poem reminds me alot of the intro to the movie The Crow.

    I wont roll over and die. I told her i would love her forever so we'll just have to keep going and try again. The reward is worth pain a thousandfold.

    Thanks Hollie, and you're allowed to call me Jon remember.

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