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cloudy days are my favorite

 

I love to open my eyes to dim mornings of cool damp
dribbling soft in through gaping windows
it warms my heart to see day hollowed out so
by feeling of invading purple and grey
excitement tickles down to core
and seeps wicked confidence to less noble intention
because on these mornings I feel absolutely sure
when evil vibrations rouse retired consciousness
grumbles will crawl out of squinted eyes
and when they meet with lazed gift of absent sun
all I need is tug on juicy flesh of lower lip

and there'll be no work for us today.

 

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Hopefully a poem you can cuddle until it giggles

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  • Treasure 5 gold member
    February 17

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    wow

    This is so wonderful, and I love the nature of this poem. I would love to see purple mixed with grey. Very much a pleasure to read.

  • Xx-Erin-xX
    February 17
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    Great write! I love it.

    "I love to open my eyes to dim mornings of cool damp
    dribbling soft in through gaping windows
    it warms my heart to see day hollowed out so
    by feeling of invading purple and grey"

    Good luck in the contest.

    Keep writing.

  • cirque du soleil
    February 17

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    'it warms my heart to see day hollowed out so
    by feeling of invading purple and grey '

    Nice poem..I too have mixed feelings about cloudy days..but mostly I like them...

    Only thing I think you spelled 'noble' wrong

    Keep it up!


  • PoeticMadnesss
    February 17

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    beautiful poem. i have mixed feelings about such days, it all depends on the warmth of the day and the smell of the air.

    and seeps wicked confidence to less nobel intention

    such a brilliant line, i love the use of words. keep up the great job!


  • Myth
    February 17
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    Great poem!

    I love cloudy days too. Gah, I can't think of anything else to say. Oh well. That was amazing!


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    February 16
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    Thanks for entering Cloudy Days Are My Favorites in the contest. I appreciate it.


  • robforte
    February 15

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    there you go, kicking ass again...

    your voice on this is unique and alluring.
    "dribbling soft in through gaping windows
    it warms my heart to see day hollowed out so "

    really? that's awesome!

    "all I need is tug on juicy flesh of lower lip "
    and "grumbles will crawl out of squinted eyes"

    absolutely delicious!



    and thank you thank you thank you for using your poetic license for good and evil, all at once, by putting punctuation and capitalization in it's place... wherever and whenever you want it (or don't)


    i've missed your work! thanks for sharing this.

    clappies!


    • Sashaness
      February 15
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      lol thanks Rob. Always a pleasure to see your thoughts. But skipping out on punctuation and capitalization hurt me so deeply! I had to force myself! lol


      • robforte
        February 15
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        ah yes...

        we all have our crosses to bear, sweetness.
        i'm sure it was torturous for you, too!

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