I am at whim within thinking, so with my thoughts I go,
To where? To where? Somehow sinking, a feeling that I know.
The birds all sing within hearing, I love so seeing them,
Robins, sparrows, jays all nearing, in songs so like a hymn.
By grace sunlight shines on them, by a mighty oak so free,
As notes of love sing anthems high, in soulful tunes of glee.
A wandering spirit am I, to see the woods alive
On hiking paths long and sighing, I watch nature revive.
I step beneath Mount Towanda, in woods around her lake,
As time so beats soundly squander its pulsing veils forsake.
So mortal life changes, drinking in sights of warmth and grace,
To see the swans wait, rethinking all known delights to face.
My dreams are drawn, bound to waking by dawns sultry light,
To know my life chances aching, of mortal tress in sight.
Author notes
Mt. Towanda is the name of the small mountain in Woburn Ma. that overlooks Horn pond, on a clear day you can see Boston from the summit.
A contest entry
- Lovely long lines by cricketjeff.
1800 points, ended March 5, 31 entries
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The beautiful scene gives me rest, but the character is unquiet; this contrast turns a question in my mind, and it is pleasant to dwell on it. The description of woods and wildlife are lovely, and the form gives structure to the poem. Well done and good luck!
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A long lined couplet sonnet about a mountain, talk about playing to the judge
This is superb stuff, with much delicious meter and construction, maybe a few lines are less smooth than the others but the overall effect is electric.
Great stuff
Jeff
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Your poem is nice and serene. I could feel like I was there. I love this line: "So mortal life changes, drinking in sights of warmth and grace"
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If we could but live outside I think you have it here . I like this!!
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this makes me feel like the courious child that I once was. You painted a picture of childhood and summer. Great ryming. I wish you the best in contest- This one is worthy of gold
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What beautiful imagery. I really felt as if I were there. Thanks for the share.
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I adore the sights sounds and feelings this wandering gypsy soul takes on paths of nature.Aside and apart from our elemental shared human of and to human/and animal relationships. The one singular part of life I too most cherish are the moments spent alone with creation of nature's rich tapistry.Inspiring poem.
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Very good, I really like how you go more into the surrounding than you do in the actual traveller. To many want to focus on the person and dont really pain the mental picture that you look for in poetry. Great job.
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you know how I feel about this type of poem... my favorite! thank you for channeling my hero: Frost. Very lovely and serene. I have taken walks like this, I could sense this poem. Great!
Jenn
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