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Misconceptions

Have you ever raised your ear,
To trace the beginning of sound,
Tried to pin the unheard on a notice board
And wait til the sun has drowned?


Carefully we wait in darkness
To play on tunes that are never heard
Trying to captivate a heart that’s decayed
Whilst nurturing a beauty that’s beyond fear.


Slowly materialising you stand
Clutching at anything you believe
Mistaking what you hold…







…be careful of lullabies
For all the are,
Are lies…     

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  • T.o.r.t.u.r.e. gold member
    September 21
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    Very nicely done


  • silverscent gold member
    August 19

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    This has a very interesting concept,
    I loved "Have you ever raised your ear,
    To trace the beginning of sound,"

    that idea just made me want to read over and over.

    Thanks for entering.



  • WuzGood
    July 16
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    NO , Sorry and good luck with the other judges, NO


  • crivanea silver member
    July 9

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    wow...this is quite interesting!..i must say I love the first 2 stanzas..and although I don't quite care for how this ended...i do like where you went with the prompt..and I can also see that this poem is well written by a talented poet..good job


  • Noir mariposa...x gold member
    July 3

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    Ooo no wonder this won bronze
    Honestly I reckon it should've been gold but still...

    I loved the first stanza the best, as it ... I dunno, stood out?

    Very nice flow and rhythm though :]


  • FreakshowAkaChristy silver member
    June 24

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    Oh my God. I don't believe what I just read. I had to reread the first stanza like 5 times. So incredibly amazing. Really weird cause im listening to Umaguma by Pink Floyd. God damn, incredible!!! Mere words cannot describe....


  • Tzipora
    June 12
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    beautiful i really liked this.


  • Kendal Palmer gold member
    May 11

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    hush-a-bye baby...

    I liked it! I liked it! I really did!! different and mysterious...fresh and new...all the elements of an original...thank you for sharing...peace and light, kp


  • sinner-
    February 15

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    Intense...I enjoyed the structure, and how u gave words to silence, and form to the invisible...great poem...


  • Angelflower
    February 15

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    oh this one gave me shivers!!! lol. i really loved the way you wrote this.. you really did a wonderful job with that picture!! Thank you very much for your entry.. best of luck in the contest!

    Angel

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