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Raw Reality

Missing image

A pleasure for puppet fingers,

they verbally pull my heart-strings

With whispers screaming silently,

in pitch corridors of stain's soul.

 

My sanctum drags down pang’s pathway,

where I once saw crackling sea-saws

In indigo clouds I inhaled,

but fell off the high of heaven.

 

Beautiful eyes caged in chaos,

blasphemous dreams leave casualties

As I exhale flaming ashes,

of suffocations dark demons.

 

In lifeless Imagination,

I saw this raw reality.

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Pic Credit: (malice_by_virusSx)

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  • queenie
    February 24

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    i was won over by the title alone. you then went on to choose the words that would emphasize it to its full potential. this is yet another winner and why you are such a talented writer. congrats.


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    February 18

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    Very imagistic. You wouldn't believe the scenes your words invoked in my mind... so vivid, detailed, and interesting...

    I love the format of this one - the placement of the stanzas on the page adds a lot to the poem, I think.

    Here's an oxymoron if I ever heard one: "In lifeless imagination" --- I would never have thought of describing it that way, but it really works! It really makes sense!

    Excellent job! Congrats on a well-deserved silver.


  • Introvert2006
    February 16

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    Excellent!

    I can see why they call you the weaver.
    Thanks for sharing, great write, powerful indeed!


  • Stardust-luvr
    February 16

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    wow deep and darkness writhes in your words on this well deserving medal winner!!! I swear we share the same darkened spirit dispite being each others' guardian angels. each line speaks loudly to this ebony soul. superb mastery my dear well done and many loving blessings always xxxx


  • Jalalbad gold member
    February 15

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  • PassionsPromise gold member
    February 15
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    wonderfully done.

    Best wishes ti you sweet soul

    Love
    Passions


  • Mistress Leala silver member
    February 15
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    Wow, very powerful indeed. Imagery was awesome.


  • Ephiphany
    February 15

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    Loved this!!!!!

    my brother this is absolutely awesome!
    Good luck in the contest, amazing work you've done here.

    Take care
    Ephiphany


  • Lonely
    February 15

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    Whispers screaming silently.. That line was intriguing and .. it hit somewhere deep. I loved this poem, and the way you ended it, you always do so well with the conclusion of your poems, that make them even more beautiful.. As I always like the dark writes, I totally enjoyed this one hubby.. I loved it, keep writing master weaver you rock!

    Love you,
    Lonely


  • Angelflower
    February 15

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    I love this!!! you really did such a great job with that picture! and the layout was intriguing as well as fitting for this read!! thank you very much for your entry.. Best of luck in the contest.

    Angel


  • Denerica
    February 15
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    As always vivid imagery and felt from with in even in the coldest and darkest of depths. Blessings.


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    February 15

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    this is incredibly vivid. you've done a brilliant job with this piece that you've penned. I really loved the last two lines.
    Excellent dark poem

    good luck
    kat


  • Introvert2006
    February 15
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    Flawless!!!


  • poetryrocksmysox
    February 15

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    Very Vivid!

    An excellent penned piece period! Not to mention how well you brought the picture prompt to life! You poetic sox!!! Thanks for weaving another masterpiece. Love that format as well. Pen on weaver~ Nice and Dark!


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    February 15
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    It's dark enough for certain
    and I think the formatting works well

    Enjoyed
    Be Well


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    February 15

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    Awesome thoughts for this picture
    prompt bro. I love your format and
    the imagery in this. Good luck!




    Jeremy0826


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    February 14
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    Best of luck bro!

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