I called my fish partner yesterday,
to see if he wanted to give the fish a whirl.
The phone rang once and picked right up,
and I heard the voice of his little girl.
It was very quiet almost a whisper,
I said , “ speak up I can hardly hear.”
I ask her to put her daddy on,
and she said “he’s not here.”
Can I speak to your mommy then,
I said quietly and added please.
“Oh no,” she whispered “you cant right now,
they’re talking to the firemen and police.”
“Firemen and police,” I exclaimed,
What happened , what could it be.?
She ( giggled ) “I’m hiding in the closet,
and they’re all out looking for me.”
P.N.
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A contest entry
- Shhhh! by condor.
1700 points, ended February 28, 2009, 18 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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well done on your win. a very naughty show on what kids would do for fun hahaha
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Fantastic
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this is highly creative and very imaginative. it expounds on the innocent viewpoint of a child. although a situation like this would be stressful to the parents, you managed to present it in humerous light. you did a great job with this. my best to you in the contest.
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Terrific write and one that got me laughing a lot. I loved this piece to bits and am still laughing as I write. This flowed beautifully and the rhythm and rhyme were perfect. I think you captured that little girl wonderfully. Hide and seek. What a game she was having with all! Thanks for the wonderful entry and the very best in the contest.
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Fun write, just like a kid...
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LOL..this captures the innocence of this picture so well. This gave me quite a good chuckle this morning, and I needed that. A very cute write! My best to you in the contest. Blessings, Patty
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I looked at this contest ...
and the picture was so cute and yet ... Your poem captured it all beautifully and I love the unexpected imagery! Nice going and this looks like a winner to me! j y
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This is a funny one; it really happened to me though so it doesn't seem that funny since I was frantic and that's exactly where she was. She was afraid to come out when she heard how upset I was.
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A GREAT poem !!!!
A wonderful light hearted take on the prompt.
Very clever.
I just love it !!!!
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This cracked me up!!! Great one from you here and good luck in the contest hon
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Great poem! This really works. Best of luck in the contest.
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