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Temptation

We danced with temptation…
Our bodies held close.
I felt your heart pounding, intoxicated with obsession, passion…lust.
Forbidden kisses ligers upon my lips.
Still just as sweet as if I were still yours.
What a wicked sensation.
What blissful kisses.
I am your lust, the betrayal of a lover.
These sins may hang us both with our lies for such a blissful crime.
Inside I wonder has fate forgotten us both?
Where we meant to be nothing more than star-crossed lovers?

Was all our time together just a cruel joke?
I was your sweet devotion, before you were hers.  
Now I am nothing more than a secret, I am your lust; a betrayal of your lovers trust.

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  • Bob Fox
    February 17

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    My poet

    Like that Wistful lover... Oh yes once I wore a younger mans cloths. How vwery delicious & yet sad.


    • Dreamerintheshadow
      February 17

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      thanks

      Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. I will return the favor by commenting on yours as well.


  • Romeo Dragonheart
    February 16

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    Beautiful I love all the refrences within your work and the flow of expression is perfect Great work
    Romeo


  • Lady Juliet
    February 14
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    Wow

    Great write!
    Excellent job!
    I also loved the part that 'C.L.Gossens' loved.


  • LoveGoneMad
    February 14

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    Great write.

    Where we meant to be nothing more than star-crossed lovers?
    Was all our time together just a cruel joke?
    - loved this part.

    It contains the potential to be longer, though a great piece as is. well done.

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