A cold and lonely winter night – the rain was pouring down
Alone I sat before the fire – my thoughts all scattered round
I listened to the howling wind – the drops upon my pane
I heard a voice come seeping through – did someone call my name
I bolted up my heart in fear – I scanned the darkened room
A shudder racing through my soul – I gazed into the gloom
But silence filled my lonely home – no sound was heard to call
Just sadness was surrounding me – just sorrow – that was all
I sat back down and closed my eyes and listened to the rain
When all at once again I heard a voice call out my name
I did not move – I could not move – I sat in utter fear
I felt a breeze go passing by – I felt a presence near
I wound my arms around myself – I dared not look to see
I heard a sigh – I felt a hand that settled down on me
I felt my body ease and still – and fear subside away
I felt the presence calming me – again I heard my name
I opened up my eyes to see but nothing was in sight
The presence there had come and gone that lonely winters night
And silence filled my lonely home – no sound was heard to call
Just sadness was surrounding me – just sorrow – that was all
20.3.2004
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Another story spun in perfect rhyme and rythrm.
Your so good at this.
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Ta, mate. Much appreciated.
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Wonderful Poem
You have penned some powerful imagery within your words. Very haunting indeed. I like the rhyming too! A pleasure to read. Take care, Sandy
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Thank you so much for your wonderful comments. I very much appreciate them.
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Excellent
Once again you provide your readers with excellent rhyme,and draw them into your words.Another wonderful poem that had me spell bound while reading and wishing for it to continue
Excellent
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Thank you so much for your wonderful comments. It is always a pleasure to have you read my works. I thank you again.
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Very beautifully written, haunting, and loved the imagery
~Marla~
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Thanks, mate. I appreciate you reading and your comments.
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Positively great
How do I double the applause,
Encore! Encore!
I couldn't help thinking of the flow of
"The raven," as I read this.
This for sure was one of the best I've read.
Artie
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Thanks, Artie for your wonderful comments. Just having you read my pieces is enough encore for me. I'll catch up with you tomorrow as tonight I am too tired to read and concentrate on any writes. Need to be awake for that.
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A wonderful and haunting write. Many years ago we would be watching TV and all of a sudden you would smell perfume, like someone just walked by. It went on for a long time and then just stopped. Your write reminded me of this. Thanks for the wonderful read.
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Thank you for reading and your lovely comments. That is really strange. We have felt that in places we have lived. It made me shiver!
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Oh cyber hug from me to you my dear friend,for I to can empathise.For I am living this poem right now.
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Hi, mate and thank you for reading. Sorry to hear that you are feeling this. I hope you can overcome whatever it is that has you feeling this. This was written in 2004. Things were tough. My love had just been diagnosed with cancer.
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Oh Excellent my friend...Chills still running up and down my spine. I have on occasions sat just as you portray and felt a presence or experienced a waft of Roses drift by me. A poem of excellent quality that many I am sure will relate to very easily...mal
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Thanks for the read. It seems that I am not alone with this smell of roses. You are the second one who mentioned that! Go figure!
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So beautiful and yet so sad, reminescent of EAP's "The Raven," having to do with missing a loved one. Excellent job
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Thanks, mate for the read. I'll have to take a look at this 'The Raven' You are the second person who has mentioned that.
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This is very well done, condor! I had ghosts on my mind from our earlier conversation, though, and between that and this eerie picture - I was expecting one! lol.
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Thank you for your comments.
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I easily liken this to one of my favorite poems, "The Raven." It has everything I love in a poem, most of all rhyme. I know there's many out there who don't, but it's one of my favorite poetic devices. "I sat back down and closed my eyes and listened to the rain / When all at once again I heard a voice call out my name / I did not move - I could not move - I sat in utter fear / I felt a breeze go passing by - I felt a presence near" Marvelous!
Brit
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Thank you so much for the read. I prefer rhyme cause you can give feeling in the rythm far more easily than freeverse, I think. I appreciate your comments and will drop by oyur page as soon as I can.
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Superb Plus +
Ah, 'tis a very fine write, indeed. Imagery; rlhythm and rhyme are just fine. Also, reminds me of one which I wrote called: "Bridges". Here's a link, if you would like to read it: http://allpoetry.com/poem/2140524
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Excellent !
I agree totally with Bob on this one. It flows and rhymes flawlessly
Well penned indeed
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Thanks, Bob. I appreciate your wonderful comments on this. You're a treasure.
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You have created an excellent but sad poem. Rhythm ,rhyme and flow is great and the lines follow beautifully , each leading to the next. A very moving piece of skillful writing.
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