black, burnt, and exposed
in wait for another flame
to light up its night
Author notes
Had a few drinks to end a long week. I was there as the barkeep whipped out those little candles for lovers or ambience... You know, at those chi-chi, fru-fru lounges.
Ehhh.... Whatever....
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Strange ...
but you've managed to take something mundane and make it sound interesting. In the last line, though, it should be "its night".
Anyway, this is certainly creative.
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It is done, my good man! LOL (Took a while to get to, huh?)
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What's that old saying?
Oh yes. "Better late than never."
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LOL @ Mallig's comment.
It's been years since I've been in a bar, lounge, or club. But God knows that I still remember some nights like this. Although most bar visits ended in a drunken stupor that gave me fierce memory loss. LOL
I love haikus that make me read them more than once. Great job dear man!
Always ♥
Renee
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LOL your author notes made me laugh.
The candle itself almost represents the people who are waiting to be set on fire.
Shari
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ah, the life of a candle in a votive. Torched and snuffed. Oh but the tales one might tell of the shadows they cast. How the mind glows.... ~ Karen
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I adore this short power filled verse of a barkeep's attempting to liven romance.
Ambiance sits the stage for a romantic awakening that might amaze.
This world needs all the help it can get after all.
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nice..
this is yet another Haiku, of which you and only maybe two other people have made me really like..it must be the high level of percision in which you've pnned this, because i'm really loving this piece!
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I like the metaphorical implications of this fine haiku, Dez - very well done.
All the best,
Bill
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Thank you, bro.
Dez
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Hmmm... lovely. I've always liked black wicks, this makes me want to go to a bar and look for one. LOL
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