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An Audience of None (one)

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would you,
if I carefully placed you,
hold your momentum
in that careless way?

would you,
if I listlessly held you,
keep up the pace
needed for today?

would you keep your bearings
in the eye of the storm?
would you keep your bearings
as you leave for something warm?

ohhhh, something more????

would you?

I hold you close
praying, oh so, sweetly,
I hold you near,
your breath so hot, so sweet, against my skin
I hold you in....

I hold you
in ....



In a list

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  • Desire gold member
    February 17, 2009

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: An Audience of None (one)
    This piece tugged hard at Spirit and after reading several times~ I am Honored also Humbled You took the time to pen for my contest You took the prompt and ran with it~ Bravo!!
    When I digest words written, images come through that grab hard~ I have to say- when I read Your words~
    This is quite the interesting piece for each time I read- I kept getting reference to an urn- mantel and ashes to ashes Very interesting- I am seeing a tombstone but no name on it~ and soil disturbed- also a picture wrapped in a shroud- in this cloth which is like a cheese cloth- but a polaroid picture
    also reference to Kentucky- word flashed while I was reading Kept seeing - Tomb of the Unknown Soldier- wild as it may sound...
    Pretty please if You could be sure and Credit: Photobucket in the AC- that would be super

    Powerful verse and message You have brought forth


    These words grabbed and pulled-
    would you,
    if I listlessly held you,
    keep up the pace
    needed for today?
    Emotional Voice spoken~

    Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit
    also best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    with much love and light~ Desire~*~


  • Stardust-luvr
    February 16, 2009

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    well done as love's precious memories lay rampant on ones mind as though still here with them. This too has brought forth tears of ......... ? well done and many blessings always xxx


  • Angelic Princess21
    February 14, 2009

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    this is a very good write. I liked it alot. You have penned a very amazing poem here. Keep up the good work
    ~Angelic Princess~

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    February 14, 2009

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    I love this great minds think alike lol we picked the same prompt good luck to you in the contest best wishes always be well.