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Be My Hero

You enter the room and time stands still,

breath held in anticipation, awaiting the thrill.

Will you say the magic words or be unaware

of my heart and eyes begging, with silent stare.

 

 

Music is softly playing a favorite tune,

all the girls are watching, in a light swoon.

Which one will be chosen tonight,

the blonde on the left or the redhead on the right.

 

 

Many evenings have I awaited your glance,

turning down all invitations to dance.

Now that you are here should I dare

be so forward and say I don't care?

 

 

Just hold me in your arms and sway

with the music as it plays?

Would you be my hero of dreams

and fly me away to places unseen?

 

 

 Would you Dance,

If I asked you to Dance?

I'm waiting on you, so please,

Save the last dance for me.

 

 

 

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Prompt was song lyrics by Enrigue Iglesias

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  • consternation imply
    July 17, 2009

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    MEMORABLE

    I remember school when the boys would come around I always seemed to like the nerdy ones. This is wonderful because anyone who reads it will have to think back to their dances back then and all of their wonderful memories.


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    May 14, 2009

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    Beautifully done!!!

    Flowing narrative with a flawless rhyme scheme...
    Soft, tender & enticing with a sensual undertone that enthralled throughout...
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!


  • drifting cloud silver member
    March 29, 2009
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    This flows so nicely and the emotion is felt.


  • Janice M Pickett
    March 26, 2009

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    Beautiful indeed. This has such a romantic yet realistic feel. It's something I am sure we have all been through at some time in our lives. Excellent


  • Desire gold member
    February 17, 2009

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: Be My Hero
    This piece tugged hard at Spirit and after reading several times~ I am Honored also Humbled You took the time to pen for my contest You took the prompt and ran with it~ Bravo!!
    When I digest words written, images come through that grab hard~ I have to say- when I read Your words~
    for some reason I kept seeing a submarine~ reference to naval- and also seeing fields- looks like wheat fields- and feeling of Serenity- a woman running and there are butterflies- ladybugs- now wild as it may seem- her eyes have no color- just the whites of her eyes are seen- but no color to her pupils- very curious- for some reason- looks like name: Rebecca- Re-being shown it in a flash-
    sooooo fast- I tried to capture... Interesting image- while I was reading- female image kept coming closer like a spectre- then reference to chaos- encounter I kept getting in image- but a cup filled with tea or coffee- on a saucer- symbolism- really interesting images~Tight rhyme also~ and pretty please if You could put which option in the AC- I am thinking lyrics prompt but like to have that validated
    Hopefully my words make some sense
    Powerful verse and message You have brought forth

    These words grabbed and pulled-
    Would you Dance,
    If I asked you to Dance?
    I'm waiting on you, so please,
    Save the last dance for me.
    Emotional Voice spoken~

    Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit
    also best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    with much love and light~ Desire~*~


  • Stardust-luvr
    February 16, 2009

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    wow a deff essence of love and romance in your words of peace thet sends my mind on a passionate journey of hope and love. well done and many blessings always xxx


  • rbruce gold member
    February 14, 2009

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    I remember that song as if it were yesterday, and the dreams I had at the time. I think this is a lovely poem and may your dreams be realised.


  • LittleMoon silver member
    February 14, 2009

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    Love that song too, and his Dad was yummy as well. You are making a super job of rhyming, much better than my attempt of freestyle that I find almost impossible. This is really nice, low lights, dance floor, romantic music and just waiting for that certain someone to ask you to dance. And then he is there .....Oh, I remember the days. Sheila

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