A scissor cut along the seam,
confusion swells in the scars,
tasting the moisture in the air,
awaking another shrill chorus
of burnt angel and shining demon,
pecking at my shoulders
like voracious chicken hawks.
Nothing is ever black and white,
I cannot see how this will end.
A tribute to the ruined damned,
no sympathy for the redeemed;
did you hear a gunshot in heaven
when the inhabitants of hell
held a party proclaiming love?
Don’t you feel like choking
on some purgatory platitudes?
A shopping list of right and wrong,
like twisted lyrics to a numbing song.
Night time brings recurring visions,
a nightmare like an eclectic scream;
the fish is now out of the water
and wondering why it has no lungs,
Darwin didn’t think to give it hope
whilst swinging like a pendulum
on the end of a barbed hook.
Bewilderment as a way of life;
a better option than the circled wagons.
Author notes
Picture Prompt B:
http://i198.photobucket.com/albums/aa28/Desirememor/Chants-Meditation/heavenandhell.jpg
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Wow; this one was intensely metaphorical
and filled with a cavernous depth. Your
use of language is brilliant here and the
junction of your words flow so well,
producing so much meaning.
This was a masterpiece, & congrats on
the gold awarded.
Best of luck & thanks for entering
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Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: :Confusion As A Way Of Life
This piece tugged hard at Spirit and after reading several times~ I am Honored also Humbled You took the time to pen for my contest You took the prompt and ran with it~ Bravo!!
When I digest words written, images come through that grab hard~ I have to say- when I read Your words~
Metaphors grabbed and I Loved the weaving of words- for some reason I kept seeing a van and when I read again- was seeing a van but looked like the emphasis might be on the graphics- like from that commercial with the I think 4 guys from different wireless companies and the Wizard- maybe Alltel- but being shown that while reading~ the focus seems to be on the Wizard- reference to Mana- and Power within You- whether spiritual-written or verbal- also re: confusion- nowwwwwwwwwww this is just what came to me- I was inhaling Your words and kept getting Ritalin- that medication- NOT saying You are on it or need to be on it- but kept getting that word- nudged to mention also reference to jitters-
images of fish out of water- flailing- and bear grabbing fish- now it feels like symbolism reference~[going backwards in thought here] the *burnt angel* ~ when I got to that line- and *shining demon* for some reason- I was shown a lynching- in the South- Civil rights violated-this feeling of You can see things nobody else can- if that makes sense-
Hopefully my words make some sense
Powerful verse and message You have brought forth
These words grabbed and pulled-
Bewilderment as a way of life;
a better option than the circled wagons.
Emotional Voice spoken~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit
also best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
**Judging will be done shortly...
Many blessings too
with much love and light~ Desire~*~
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