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something beautiful

everything that i see
is just as ugly as me
everything that i am
is just a part of the scam
and all that i want to be
just drains all my energy
and my love has expired
i have had enough
and i feel so tired
i just want to sleep it off
so tell me something beautiful
to see if i can feel again
yeah, tell me something wonderful
lie to me just like a friend

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  • Raining Kisses silver member
    May 26

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    This is....
    how to start, this poem just makes me want to send you ice cream or something, it has such a desolate feel to it,
    I feel so tired
    I want to sleep it off
    My love has expired
    And I have had enough
    sweet jesus, this is completely heart stopping

    I get those days, when i am so desperate just to feel alive, that i have to go to the cliff tops, just to feel the thrill of being too close to the edge

    The simplicity here is so seductively deliciously in keeping with the piece, it just smacks of vulnerability, I love it, omg I reeeeely love it
    Its beautiful, utterly beautiful

    Thankyou, really, thankou

    Now I will tell you something beautiful, and its not a lie

    you have the ability to change people for the better with your words, buid bridges, ease pain, colour sorrow rainbow coloured
    That is a beautiful gift, so just keep on being you
    T


  • cheaphotelsign
    February 17

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    came back for a few more read-throughs...still really like it...still think you are beautiful (just realized you posted this on valentines day)


  • drake21
    February 17

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    I know this feeling. You would do anything just to feel something but trying just drains you so badly. I like it.

  • cheaphotelsign
    February 15
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    first of all, babe...you are anything but ugly...you are beautiful, handsome, refreshing and such a sweetness in your voice...and that spills out into your words...this is a great write...honest and real...a bit on the edge...i dig it, like i dig you..lol you are wonderful


  • mystic1409
    February 14
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    Wow! Such emotion! This is a beautiful write.


  • journey777
    February 14
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    wow

    i feel dat way a lot i think im fat but ma mom doesnt, i bet u ur not that bad


    • teddybare
      February 15
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      lol

      thank you 4 your comment... and i am sure your mom's right you're probably not fat... besides if you are fat... just remember fat people are jolly

      thanx again
      ~teddybare~

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