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God is Time (Spend it with Him)

An eon has a beginning and an end
Otherwise there would not be more than one
One just ended yesterday at the bend
Time warp for the new one has just begun
Did you celebrate with God or just send
Regrets because You are the Only one

That`s worthy of respect in Your own mind
Be grateful that our God is also kind.

Author notes

An ottoma rima for my Eternal Valentine

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  • Starrchild777 gold member
    February 26, 2009

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    Solid sincere message but it seems to get garbled with the punctuation. Perhaps,you should read aloud with its present puntuation and then decide. The short directness still gives it room for interpitation.

    ~Starr~

    • Bob 42 silver member
      February 27, 2009
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      Thank you Starr

      How right you are
      Punctuation
      Has been a bar
      My creations
      Never go far
      Publications
      Not up to par

      Thanks again for your advice........Bob 42


  • Rose Angel gold member
    February 18, 2009

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    Thought provoking moving write...Cleverly and creatively penned with dedication and love to the Almighty....Worthy of Praise...Excellently scribed...


  • GotLilt
    February 14, 2009
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    I like this. Many things can be taken from reading it. I don't normally read twice, but I did!