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Where the rocks of Ardnamurchan meet the rolling Gaelic Sea

 

 

 Where the rocks of Ardnamurchan meet the rolling Gaelic Sea,

 Where the reef-jawed whirlpools gnash their teeth and roar,

 There’s a lass whose gaze is seaward, standing in the menhir’s lee

 On fair Alba’s ever-westward-facing shore.

  

 She is patient in the gloaming, through the tempests and the gales,

 For the mists to lift and Barra to be seen,

 For the beating of the galley-oars, the slapping of the sails,

 And the sight of Somerled’s royal barquentine.

 

 For her lover is a sailor in the service of the Laird

 Whose demesne runs from St Kilda to Goat Fell;

 And her memory’s a wishing-store of youthful days they shared,

 Of the many yesteryears since their farewell.

 

 On the days when sunshine strokes the shore and calm sea mirrors sky,

 She may shade her eyes and touch her beating breast,

 For the white wings of a fulmar turn to ship-sails in her eye,

 And for one brief moment she is heaven-blessed.

 

 She will wait and wait forever, for the lassie does not know

 That the Island Chieftain’s galley’s gilded side

 By Atlantic squalls was shattered, and in Cape Wrath’s undertow

 Roll her lover's bones, in that relentless tide.

 

 Where the cliffs of Ardnamurchan brave the Minches’ treachery

 And the machair grasses whisper we have sinned,

 Where the selkies’ siren voices and the wail of the banshee

 Sound a distant, sullen pibroch in the wind,

 

 There’s a grey-clad shade a-keening as she joins their ghostly song

 With a counterpoint of sigh, and sob, and moan;

 And the neebours pull their blankets close, awake the whole night long,

 While Sionad Ni’Choinnich walks the cliffs alone.

 

 Oh, the rubha of Ardnamurchan is a finger pointing west,

 It’s a lonely place of rock, and sea, and cloud;

 There I cross my heart and pray that lonely spirit finds her rest,

 May the mist and dewfall be her gentle shroud.

 

 By the fire, in Tobermory, we may drink a warming dram,

 And toast all who live in Mull-of-Many-Trees,

 But we leave the rubha to Sionad, to the wedder and the ram,

 To the selkie-song and its forlorn reprise.

 

 Oh, beware the heart, avoid the love for men who sail away

 To the oil-rigs or the ocean fishing-ground;

 For the years are short, the sunshine cheap, all wealth spent in a day,

 And our death at last all pleasures will confound.

 

 

 

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Please note that the word rubha is a mono-syllable.

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  • Congratulations on the coveted golden goblet. I might have read this before, but it's still great.

  • Fantastic

    A masterful Celtic creation indeed. You really are a brilliant poet, mairi, and this amazing piece is certainly deserving of the coveted golden goblet.


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      March 28
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      I wouldn't tout it as one of my best, but I am glad you like it.

  • Topnotchsy
    March 11

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    This is incredibly stunning, one of the most beautiful pieces I've ever read. Congrats on the well deserved gold for it, and thanks for sharing it. If I could, there'd be way more than 3 clappy guys here hanging around to read this over and over again.


  • Keith
    March 6

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    No Fair!

    Och, this is chust sublime! Beats my wee offering intae a lum hat! Have some applause, fer goodness sake, Lassie!


  • just rob gold member
    March 6
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    Well Done

    Congrats on a well deserved award.


  • MLMorin
    March 5
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    Wow, this took my breath. Beautiful imagery. Certainly deserving of the gold.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    March 5

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    I have bashed seven shades of sh*t out of this contest to try to come to a conclusion, between you and Jim there is not really anything to choose here. In the end I have plumped for your meter, pluperfect of course and story telling over his verbal gymnastics (Jimnastics?) but I can't say. I could read the pair of you all day.

    This is too good to comment critically except to say I hate the wide spacing and your last line is still rendered in a different font, but I don't mark on such things

    This really is worth a

    Not Bad

    or even perhaps

    FUCK!!!!!!


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      March 5
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      Thank you for the gold, bro.

      The spacing is a problem for me. I drafted it with ( I think) either 6pt or 10pt spaces, because it looked wrong to me with 0pt, too condensed. The trouble is, I can't reproduce the spacing here in AP, and my only alternatives were no spacing (too condensed) or double (to wide, but nearer what I wanted).

      As for the last line different font business, you seem to be the only person who can see that! Och well.


  • moonbumps silver member
    March 2

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    Classy poem- never missing a beat-flow as smooth as cream-Lovely read.
    Hilly


  • londiscarpenter
    February 24
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    another that should be in finals

    I really enjoy reading your works and will be searching for more. A fine write.


  • Tirrell
    February 19

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    A tale well told, I simply love this one. Its imagery to me is beautiful and awestruck by it as I read on. It hooked me good and moved me along everforward. The motion and dramatic sweep of this make for a memorable read.


  • SomeonesToySoldier gold member
    February 15

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    Wow very good. Reminds me alot of some of the books I read when I was younger by G.A. Henty although I'm not sure why. You did a great job though and I feel that jeff should reward you for this great poem. Good luck though in his contest.


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    February 15

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    This is just amazing! Your imagery and flow just made my jaw drop and you write with such panache! Publish girl! Publish!
    Gaylene


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      February 15
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      I have published a little bit, Gaylene, but no bad salads like this.


  • hawkeslake gold member
    February 15

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    I don't even have words to say how much I admire this poem. I've been to Scotland twice, once spent a month there, and just loved it. I could hear this as a spoken or sung ballad in my mind's ear, and it brought back all the memories of all the pubs we visited, and the legends which seem to be around every corner. Love the language as you used it here, and most of the time I did pretty well with imagining the pronunciations. I didn't know rubha was one syllable, though; it is "ruff"? Or "run'? At any rate, this is a joy to read. Bookmarked for sure. Thank you. Lita

    • Mairi bheag gold member
      February 15
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      I occasionally break into some kind of ballad form, with my tongue planted firmly in my cheek. This one I wrote specially for the contest (I don't often do that - I prefer to write what I feel like writing), and the setter called for the rhythm of "Mad Carew" - so I wrote the whole thing in the metre of the first verse of that old melodramatic monologue.
      http://oldpoetry.com/opoem/9245-J-Milton-Hayes-The-Green-Eye-Of-The-Little-Yellow-God

      "Rubha" is pronounced (depending where you are in a'Ghaidhealtachd) "ru'", "rua", or "ruwa", but never exactly as two syllables, never "roo-wah"!


      • Exit-Stage-Right
        February 22
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        How funny is that... your word that looks like two syllables is actually one... and "Jim" which appears to be one syllable will soon be pronounced "WIN-ner".


  • Sheli silver member
    February 14
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    BRILLIANT!


  • redbird
    February 14
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    i just love your vocabulary


  • IronMaiden1236
    February 14

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    What!!!

    That's GREAT, start my day with a cry!!! And with a cold too....damn, love...nothing so profound ....or unnerving!!! As usual, absolutely beautiful!!!
    You make me want to hijack a jet and come roll in the moors and sea breezes!!


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      February 14
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      It's February and the prevailing wind at Ardnamurchan is right in your face!

      Thank you.


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    February 14

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    Oustanding.
    This is timeless and sets me in that place so effectively it all becomes real...more than a poem, you open doors.

    Now I need my dictionary, the Gaelic one.


  • masterblaster gold member
    February 14

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    Hi, beautiful poem, the rhyme and meter are spot on, loved your notes,lol, seems to happen a lot, great write, Di


  • Black Narcissus gold member
    February 14

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    Quite an amazing poem.

    While Sionad Ni’Choinnich walks the cliffs alone.

    I've been chewing on that line for ages trying to get the pronunciation to come out properly.

    Wonderful.



    • Mairi bheag gold member
      February 14
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      You could say "Jeanette McKenzie"

      (OK, say "Shonat Ni'Connick", that'll be close enough, and it is indeed the Gaelic equivalent of Jeanette or Janet McKenzie).

      I'm glad you liked it.

  • Bad Bill
    February 14

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    By the Paps o' Auchtermuchty, give the rest of us poor mortals a chance, lass!

    Good stuff,
    Bill


  • Amera gold member
    February 14

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    I love it when you paint imagery of your country in my mind, you do it in only a way your poetic voice can. The rhyme the flow and the beauty of this poem is worth many re-reads.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Ceridwens Soul silver member
    February 14

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    Brillig!

    Images of my imagined Scotland === oh do I need to cross the border one day or maybe I shouldn't and keep the dream. Language perfect and brings the whole poem to life.


  • nansie
    February 14
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    WOW!!!

    It will take a good poet to beat you at this contest!!


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      February 14
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      Thank you. But every time anyone says that, I end up without even a sniff of a trophy!


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    February 14

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    Well slap me silly and send me down the street talking to myself because by all the gods this is epic! Oh my dear, without a doubt, your literary cannons are mighty and fierce!


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