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Worthless

Let the poison spread
Like roots
Choking my life out
Soulless

Stretching out like the sky
Up above me
Drown in me in unbroken blue
Heartless

Tears fall down like rain
Bullets on my back
Pouring upon me hatred
Faithless

Peonies on my chest
Make a pretty bouquet
For you to give away
Pointless

... Or dying?

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  • KnightOfTheRose gold member
    May 4
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    I liked the stanza endings, they went well with each other "Soulless, Heartless, Faithless, Pointless" you need to get more comments on your poems I read the one you just posted and thought I'd like to see what you had come out with recently...



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