Dear Unknown,
I lie here, broken and battered on the dirt filled street.
My tear stained face is dirty, I barely see the gushing wound.
I barely hear the disapproving snarls from the people walking by.
I barely taste the blood sloshing around in my throat.
But I can feel the rain drenching my back, bashing it carelessly… just like father did.
Almost as hard as father did.
I feel my failing heart beating again, slower each passing time.
I feel your violet eyes caress my barren skin, stroking my shattered soul.
You still watch me, a penny in your hand, running to the phone booth.
Blackness surrounds me… as the wind roars in my ears, I hear you speak to the phone.
‘Somebody, please somebody… she’s dying…. She’s… She’s… Her pulse has stopped... she’s dead.’
My arms are weak, limp at my side.
The end of the road calls forth, I know I was right.
I needed saving.
Author notes
I'm sorry... I sort of went abstract here.. not the typical letter.. more like a mental note.. last thoughts. I hope this wasn't to bad.. I was a bit depressed when I wrote it!
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Dang, it's kind of hard to imagine how this girl managed to write a letter since she's practicly dead. (pertaining to your macabre discriptions)
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use ur imagination. not everything is literal in poetry.
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awwwww ... that is just ... awww I am speechless, sighs. I want a rescue story now or I will be depressed. So well written as always.
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This is powerful in its emotions, and you did a great job using some amazing imagery in this letter poem. I love the ending especially. Great job, and thanks so much for entering. Blessings, Patty
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Omg miki this is so sad!!
It's really beautiful and i love the gut-wrenching imagery hehe. Brings tears to my eyes!!
You'll definately win the comp!! xxxx -
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tan three
come on msn!
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and thanks for the comment.. but this poem is pretty crap lol
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Whoops....missed these...
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Your portrayal of someone needing a Savior to rescue them, is very powerful here, luv....Maybe a better color in the background...Skillful penning....
write..
Mom
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