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history class

i see the way
you slap your hand and forget to
promise another day in good health


ignorance growing from the tip of your green nose held up so high i thought you were trying to smell the sky


and its been
hundreds of years
and
we still don’t mesh our gears well enough to run this clock called time
counting down the moments till we reach an everlasting peace


i feel the moths eating out holes in my pockets
and all i want
is to write beat poetry

Author notes

today someone in my history class was so ignorant about things
i almost cried


stupid people = our biggest problem

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  • toomysterious
    February 18

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    And this definitely has a beat feel to it, I can hear it being recited in some underground coffee house in Greenwich Village. Do they still exist? Ignorance is inexcusable, it leads to terminal stupidity. I liked this, can you tell? I found it very refreshing and a great change of pace.


  • skye01 gold member
    February 18
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    Very well written. I really like the flow of this Good job


  • Candy Morphine
    February 17

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    ignorance growing from the tip of your green nose held up so high i thought you were trying to smell the sky
    -Irony, i love it. This extremely clever and very lip-twisting.

    Very good write, again!


  • you lack luster
    February 16

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    mmmm love ittt,

    we still don’t mesh our gears well enough to run this clock called time
    counting down the moments till we reach an everlasting peace

    amazing;;
    of course


  • AniLee
    February 16

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    I like what this has to say, sometimes people can be so.... different. It's a wonder that we can even exist in the same places at all....
    And yet, I guess history shows us that we can't really, can we?
    +sigh....+
    ah.... xD you can probably tell, but this made me think


  • innocence jaded.xx
    February 15

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    -and its been
    hundreds of years
    and
    we still don’t mesh our gears well enough to run this clock called time
    counting down the moments till we reach an everlasting peace
    ...

    wow, dear. that's incredible. seriously (: where do you come up with these ideas!? they're brilliant ! (:
    keep it up dearest♥


  • August Starlight silver member
    February 14

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    My history class was retarded as well. People in that class were so stupid. Anyway, this is a really awesome write with great imagery.


  • hks
    February 14
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    you didnt answer my question

    WHY GREEN
    lol

    THERE IS NO SNOT HOW DARE U
    =P


  • new born
    February 14
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    Really good poem. It's interesting & a little abstract with a very important/relatable theme.
    'we still don’t mesh our gears well enough to run this clock called time
    counting down the moments till we reach an everlasting peace'
    Great job. This is really interesting.


  • hks
    February 13
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    green or blue?

    im confused again :[


  • broken-colours
    February 13

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    indeed.
    people like that annoy me to pieces.

    you've conveyed this feeling very eloquently & tastefully.

    I need to comment on more of your stuff.
    love you.
    <3

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