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All of me

You will always have
my heart,
my love,
wherever we are.

Author notes

Short, but I hope you liked it anyway.
I wrote it for my boyfriend (long-distance).

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  • Sentimentalpoet
    August 31
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    sweet

    well that was a short poem but it was so cute. good job.


  • Swordhigh
    July 12
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    This is super sweet


  • TokyoMewMewIchigo
    February 18
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    Thanks!

    THX! It's GreaT! Short.Its' short could be longer but its good.


  • Cloudwalker
    February 14
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    short and lovely i agree with ronniep23 the third line would be more powerful without the and.

  • ronniep23
    February 13

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    like it!
    it sounds like it sould be on a heart shaped charm given to a loved onewhile apart.
    i would take the "and" out

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