Leaves
released
like kites...
soaring
unhindered
landing in a stream,
kayaking rapids
sand scoured
hues erased
and again
taking wind
Author notes
Prompt: Friction (20 words)
A contest entry
- 10/20/30 Friday evening poetry slam by Freestyle Bushido.
450 points, ended February 13, 2009, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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What a perfect metaphor for life... just goes to show ya, don't count anyone out until they are dead and long gone, lol!!! Short, succinct and immensely hopeful.. just the way I like 'em!!!
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I like this.
Love,
Ylova
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I loved it. I liked the way you made the leaves come to life with your poem. I felt carried away by it, a peaceful soothing impact.
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i really like the flow of this piece. Thank you for entering and good luck.
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Awesomeness.
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Wonderful thought for this prompt.
I love the imagery in here.
Good luck to you!
Jeremy0826 -
amazing take on the prompt. well done.
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