Death did still my trembling heart
When with Laera it did depart.
With ashen wings it did eclipse
Her azure eyes – those pouting lips!
What right has claimed their sanguine hue?
What office left them cold and blue?
That breath has ceased to from them sluice…
Laera, Laera! My own lips to loose…
A sigh and shudder flees my frame
Whene’er my mind recalls that name,
The days She whiled whilst in my arms,
Pulse impassioned ‘neath Her charms.
Oh, the humour with which cruel fate does dote –
What one hand gave the other smote!
Rent joy went when desire met plot,
Through which brum bereavements and adieus are wrought.
This plot stole the flutter that within me was wont,
And made of a garden a benighted ghoul’s haunt.
With ivy thus courting thee, Laera my dear,
No sun, moon, or star can scatter such drear,
No light pales the pall that thy passing has left –
No song stirs my spirit…only thou were so deft.
Death did still my trembling heart,
And yet unplucked remains the dart
Whose potion twined one soul of two,
Unfreed before the parting cue.
For though repose thou do naught but,
Thy azure eyes have never shut –
In dreams I descry the tranquil gaze
That marked the finest of my days.
The weary sleep that woe provides,
Like nepenthe that from Poe hides,
Knights this mind with visions rich,
But ne’er again have I heard that pitch
That once wove melody with arachnid skill –
The song that midnight skies would fill.
How lithe the silk of song thou poured!
How sweet beyond the craft of chord!
No note string made could supplant the seed
That every breath watered with loving heed.
Only in the fleeting reaches of dream
Do I glimpse those lips and, if derf fates so deem,
The last dulcet remnant of Laera McGee –
I’m in love with a phantom twice torn from me.
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gorgeous
another beautiful poem, love! as if straight from the era of poe, you've captured the pain of true love lost but not forgotten. i really love this poem, the imagery is amazing, as always, and i can really connect with the emotions flowing through it. you always have a way of drawing the reader in with your word choice, how well your writing flows, and emotions anyone can relate to. wonderfully done!
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Once I started reading this, I was reminded of Poe's "The Raven" because of both the styling of the words, the poem itself, and the subject of a lost love. Usually I get bored with lost love poems, but once in a while, I come across one beautifully written. You impressed me with two things I do not usually find appealing in most poems- your subject choice and your rhyme scheme. I am glad I clicked on this poem. You are very talented. Thanks for sharing this work with the rest of us.
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Thank you for your great comments, PrettyRagDoll. Reading that you were drawn into the poem, and that you liked it despite your usual preferences, that is just wonderful to me. Thank you so much for taking the time to read the poem and for letting me know you enjoyed it. Your comments are much appreciated!
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Thanks, Strangefruit. I'm glad you liked the poem, thanks for taking the time to read it!
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oh! this was truly something beautiful! I love the feel of this write! the your word usage was magnificent!! truly something to be admired!! the imagery was softly crafted and vivid. The emotion was heartfelt and beautiful.. I truly loved reading this , and I believe it's worth another read.. something to truly be enjoyed.. thank you very much for sharing!!
Angel
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You really remind me why I continue to write, AngelFlower. That there are still people out there who enjoy the classical tools of prosody, imagery and true emotion. I'm really glad you enjoyed the poem. Thank you for your great comments, and for taking the time to read it!
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wonderful write from you. you definitely classified this correctly and your use of language is magnificent. thank you for sharing this with me today. viyanna rosemarie
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Thank you for taking the time to read the poem and comment on it, Viyanna. I'm pleased that you enjoyed it and that it meant something to you. It's always great to hear that one's work is appreciated, so thank you very much.
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Magnificent!
You have painted a beautiful loving portrait with words. Wonderful work.
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Thank you very much for the comment, Howard! I worked hard on this poem, so I am glad you enjoyed it!
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I sense a love continued through the ages, meeting fleetingly in flesh, then being torn apart by death with the memory of her siren's song always in the background. It's reminiscent of Romeo & Juliette, while at the same time it puts me in mind of angelic influences. Beautifully written, commendable command of the language!
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Thank you so much, TheRose, for your comments and critique. I'm glad the poem spoke to you as it did, and that you were able to enjoy it!
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This poem feels like it was written a long time ago, just the style and the words you have used, i love it for this reason. It is a really great read.
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Thank you for the comment, Holly! The older poets are some of my major influences, so I am glad to see that those traits came through in my writing. I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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