I snatch unsigned words from
your lips.
Place each on a line of twisted papers; children’s airplane.
It flies, then unfolds under
my longing fire, & reads:
“I promise love
...for as long as we both shall live”
(C)Noor 13/2/2009
Author notes
Contest prompt:
"...for as long as we both shall live"
end your poem with the above line 30 words or less
(take it where you will)
Meh!
Thanks for reading!
In a list
A contest entry
- Swift This Line...(Quicky) by Ken-Maverick.
650 points, ended February 19, 2009, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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very creative
you are so very clever with a pen
beautifully done
God bless you my friend...
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Very beautiful!
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Awesomely finished.
The airplane just a stunning touch. -
Ah..the image is very impressive and the truth is very strong you revealed..very strong poetry indeed...thanks for sharing..
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This is so good. Its simple but says so much. It also says a little something personel for me. Nice work as always my friend.
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JUDGED!!
Can't help but get the feeling that this is really personal, wonderfully penned though
All the best to you in the contest
Ken -
It flies well.
Nice response to the contest rules. -
This is wonderful...words set free to fly. Bravo!
Mariana
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Lovely poem, tender as a budding flower.. I loved it and wouldn't change a thing..
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ohhhhhh,,, what a sweet poem,,,so heartfelt and descriptive,,, it makes me smile, envisioning recieving this from somebody,,,,SO SWEET! good luck in the contest
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A flight of fancy
Very descriptive verse, hope it's true for you
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:'( beautiful
i love your writing
i honestly do
you seem like such a pure person
as you are a pure poet
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