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Aberrations of Your Soul

Missing image
I tried to be free,
but under lock and key
you haunt me in my dreams.
With a skeletal finger
running down my cheek,
your laughter resonates,
my beating heart in your hand,
and blood splattering my face.
The warm salty liquid chokes.
Your cold lips against mine,
I feel my life slipping away,
convulsing and twisting
while your hollow eyes look on.
Your breath is hot and putrid,
bringing tears to my eyes,
but I am leaving now.
Blood soaks the sheets;
my chest, sunken from death,
rises no more, as I take your hand.
Floating off, I rise with a jerk –
Oh, God, this love is killing me.

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  • rainbows. gold member
    July 7

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    Stanzas would make this really interesting.

    I like this. You had a lot of good imagery and emotion here. Thanks for entering this into my contest.

  • XxLoverOfDarknessxX
    June 4

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    woah...this was really good. very creepy as well. it sent shivers down my spine. an amazing write! keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!


  • Night Terrors
    May 31

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    going to comment on every five lines as I read this.

    First 5: so far extremely creepy! Really am liking the rhtme thus far as well.

    Second 5: yikes!!!!!! Zobies? or ghosts? That is really really freaky I think you are telling a really great story so far...

    Thrid 5: so as he/she rips out you heart kisses you then puts his/hers stinky breath in your face how rude! lol

    Conclusion:

    ermmmm in love with the reaper or um what????? I am kinda confused now but this was really creative none the less


  • Autumn Ginger
    May 23

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    creepy... the part about the skeletal finger reminds me about Halloween for some reason good luck!


  • Zombiefreak13
    May 22
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    ooooh chilling!!!! i do love this one!!!!


  • Butterfly.Wingz
    May 22

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    oooo amazing rythem in this piece I loved this idea of a nightmare and it came out like a piece of heaven awesome job good luck.

  • abmsem
    April 19
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    I love it. Especially the last line, so effective. Thanks for sharing and good luck in my contest


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    March 10

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    Couldn't have put it better if I tried. In the exact same position in many ways, my ex haunts my dreams.


  • XartistXinXhidingX
    March 6

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    wow!!!!

    this is an amazing poem! i loved it! amazing imagery and you took the picture and made it fit the pome! great! good luck!


  • BrokenSanity
    February 22

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    Wow, this is full of imagery and powerful lust of death, ME LIKE!!! Mwa ha ha ha! *Narrows eyes and smiles*
    I liked the flow of this, it worked well with the mood of the poem, well done!
    Thank you for entering, and good luck!


  • August Starlight silver member
    February 17

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    I enjoyed this, especially the last two lines. I wish you the best of luck in the contests. =]

    -Jackie


  • chael
    February 16

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    I can't see

    It's so bloody dark, And the moon is crimson. very disturbing;I love it .....chael  May I say you should read "Heart Of Hate" it may please you or it may make you angry but I promise it will effect you.

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