Harness it safely out of reach;
Only these few lessons you need to teach; so
Lull it's joyous flutter softly to sleep; and
Don't ever allow it to release a peep.
Inject despair wherever you see need;
Never let a man plant his seed; it'll
Grow and grow till you can't even weed.
Baring a secret, he leaves the plant to die;
And you're left there, wilting, wondering why?; so
Carry your heart safely out of reach;
Keep in control and these walls won't be breached.
Author notes
HopelessDreams
Option 1
Picture http://ayatseifelnasr.deviantart.com/art/Holding-on-50219369
This poem took me longer than most do, so I hope you like it, though I know it's a little rough. Probably needs a little revision still.
A contest entry
- Holding Myself Back (Quotes and Pictures) by The Reapers Angel.
550 points, ended March 2, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Oh, and please put you SN in your AN.
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I think the form of the acrostic needs a little work, The words on the end of lines 2, 3, and 9 I couldve done without, and line 6 would need that word at the end removed somehow as well.
Aside from those little details, I liked this poem a lot.
The message was well put across, and your rhyming was pretty good. Thank you kindly for your entry.
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Thanks! SN is screen name I'm taking it? I haven't been up to date on all the acronyms lol
And yeah, I had trouble setting it up to get the message I was aiming for using the vertical letters and maintaining a bit of flow and rhyme. lol
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