In a sleepless slumber,
thoughts of ghost stories dance around your memories.
Stories of ghost, ghouls, and Vampires.
You open your eyes,
standing in the middle of no where.
You hear music,
leading you to their masquerade.
Shadows dance through the midnight mist upon the waters surface,
they float along in their eternal dance.
Skin white as the fresh snow,
eyes as cold as the ground you walk upon.
They cover their faces,
and dance the night away in their masquerade .
Their hunger rises,
as the moon.
Shadows start to slip away into dark,
Leaving you standing there all alone.
A chill lurks around you,
sending shivers down to the depths of your being.
The colorful costumes fade away,
lost in the darkness you try to follow the shadows.
Reaching out he Bows to you,
you close your eyes and bow your head.
Opening your eyes adorned with gown and mask,
you dance with him as you float on the water.
Gazing into his eyes you become sleepy,
He lays you across his lap.
Pulling your hair back he bites,
making you his for all of eternity.
All around are shadows,
taking you with them.
You awake to see him with out his mask,
the masquerade is over.
You are his lover,
You are his prey,
You are a shadow,
forever to dance upon the nights mist.
Author notes
"I can't believe that I've lived throught this!"
OK here is my stab at being dark...and writing about a vampire.. If I had to be something like that and I had a choice.. I would so be a Vampire... Great contest... I hope you enjoy this!!
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You awake to see him with out his mask,
the masquerade is over.
You are his lover,
You are his prey,
You are a shadow,
forever to dance upon the nights mist.
very good write! -
"You are his lover,
You are his prey,
You are a shadow,
forever to dance upon the nights mist."
another beautiful write
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Very good
With all the darkness portraied maybe we need colorless costumes. Love is blind, you know.
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I will say that this certainly had me going for while. I was trying to see where it headed. And then the end came. Amazing! I loved the dark in it, I loved the imagery! this was an amazing write. I liked this alot. Best of luck!
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interesting. I gotta say that I liked it. You wrote this very well. It is dark.. I like the way you interduced the darkness by mentioning ghosts, ghouls, and vampires... you set the pace with that and drew your readers in. Good job.
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wow i really like this, and how you put masquerade in it, lovely. i like how you lead the reader into it. wonderful job and good luck
Stephanie ♥ -
Hi !
Love it ! For your first stab at being
a vampire , you did excellent !!
Best wishes !! Friend Easy
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oooh I like this, very mysterious
A couple things, In the fourth stanza do you mean "Colorful" or "Color filled" because it's not "color full". And second I think the last line of the last stanza should be 2 lines:
"You are to be a shadow
forever to dance upon the nights mist."
Other than that I really like this, good luck in the contest!
Blessings,
~Michaela~
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Thank you dear... they helped so much... lol i can't beleve i missed the colorful thing lol oh well thanks hun!!
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