Let's ride upon a shooting star,
for just a moment shall we live.
But oh so brightly we will burn,
And oh the feeling we will give.
To lovers who in darkness cast,
an eye toward the heaven's face,
and watch in silent awe as we,
Streak past, then vanish without a trace.
Let's spread our wings upon the winds,
Allow our souls to brave the storm.
To laugh as hail and lightening strike,
And know our hearts are safe and warm.
We'll swirl and dance within the gale,
Set free our hearts of hurt and pain,
To let them fade into the clouds,
and drop to earth as falling rain.
A contest entry
- 1st Contest! PIC Prompt. by jenadyleigh.
1100 points, ended February 16, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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A Fine Poem
I especially like the first verse. Either of these two verses seem to me to be able to stand alone. But they relate the same point and work well together.
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Very nice.
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This is amazing.
You are amazing.
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a beautiful poem good luck in the contest
maralisa
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Thank you so much for entering! This is beautiful and the background is amazing. I loved the imagery you used. Brilliant. Well done!
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:O
I'll kick that Wheel-Barrow over!
This is stupendous
Okay, so really:
I loved it.
Soft and whimsical, and full of feeling and imagery, I was sitting here thinking...
What the hell..
Why can't we ride shooting stars
NOT FAIR!
Great job bro, I loved it!
You always seem to do so good!
I hope I can achieve one TENTH of how good you do one day
At least then I will be proud of my achievements...
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amazing!
only thing i found was:
"Streak past, then vanish without a trace."
- felt longer than the rest of the lines, how about:
'Streak past, then vanish with no trace.'
But really, this was excellent.
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