Lips of red,
heart of gold,
black velvet hair,
eyes of the blue sea.
Is this how you see me,
is it real or really fake.
I hide my face,
you made it black and blue.
Lips of pale pink,
heart of gold,
Chocolate brown hair,
eyes of hazel.
This is who I am,
It is real and not fake?
I'm not a plastic barbie.
I don't want to be one.
You can't make me.
Is this how you see me,
is it real or really fake.
I hide my face,
you made it black and blue.
I don't want to be who you want me to be,
you broke my arm,
I left... I'll never come back..
I'm not your Barbie..
I'm me!!
Author notes
I believe that we all have been made into this or that in our lives... and I hate when people try to fit me into a the perfect thing they want me to be! I say no more of that... We should be just left alone to be whole we are... not made to fit what people want us to be!!!
What did you think
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"Is this how you see me,
is it real or really fake."
This should end in a '?' as it's a question, I think.
I think this is a very powerful poem.
The message in it is very strong.
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thanks for the comment
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Wow. Very powerful write. Nice imagery and metaphors used, and it was very insightful indeed. I came from an abusive relationship (recently stopped it) and this screams out the truth. Well done and thanx for sharing your deepest thoughts. I hope this is not from a personal experience. Take care,
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Thank you for taking the time to read my work
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I'm not your Barbie..
I'm me!!
i have seen too many date when they are just looking for an arm piece. it is so sick and wrong. you wrote this well. thank you for sharing this with me today. viyanna rosemarie
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thank you so much for taking the time to read my work.
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Very moving. Too many people think they can change people to who they want them to be, even by force if necessary. All to often, the results are tragic. Take me as I am or don't take me at all.
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Since this has taken place I have become able to speak my mind and say no. Just as you said it Take me as I am or don't take me at all... thank you for taking the time to read my work.
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theres a part in your poem the reads "I left... I'm never come back.." you might want to take a brief moment and take a look at that. i like how you took the referance of th barbie and related to what this individua want you to be. keep on writing!!!!!
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Thanks for pointing out that little thing... Thanks for taking the time to read it!!
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Very well said... It's like in the book Jane Eyre where she professes that she cannot be an angel to him, that she is just herself... Your poem deals with some very real issues and is very accessible. Well done.
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This is amazing, I'm so speechless. I think so many guys want girls to be this cookie cutter shape, it's stupid. I love this piece! So true(: Keep it up!
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this is perfect.... I can't explain what was going throughb my mind during the time I was reading this... It made me think of how much of a strong person you must be... Did his really happen to you??!!?!?!?!
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In some form... he wanted the perfect girl and im sure not that perfect girl..and hunni im not perfect!!
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amen to your AN, This was a beautiful piece, I love the whole meaning behind this it runs deep and I know a lot of people will enjoy this
wonderful write, great job!
Blessings,
~Michaela~
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I'm glad you enjoyed it... I love your comments.. I think you are an amazing person thank you for taking the time hun!!
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"Lips of red,
heart of gold,
black velvet hair,
eyes of the blue sea."
"Lips of pale pink,
heart of gold,
Chocolate brown hair,
eyes of hazel."
i most of all like the meaning of this whole write, nice one
but i especially like these two stanzas which held description... it just sounded so beautiful...
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THANK YOU HUN.. i think you are one of my best ""fans"" thank you
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