When Sunday was dawning
and the world sat up yawning,
I just closed my eyes
and hoped to dream of you;
the things left unsaid
as I lay down in bed,
we’re crushing me down
but this is nothing new.
There is always next Saturday
when I can look into your eyes,
there is always another day,
where I can stay silent in love
and watch my hope as it dies.
When Friday comes calling,
I realize that I’m falling
in love with you again,
it’s now a weekly occurrence;
when I feel your breath on my ear,
I fear that you are standing so near
that I’ll dissolve into you,
you’ll know what my heart is yearning.
There is always next Saturday
when I can look into your eyes,
there is always another day,
where I can stay silent and hope
that I’m just telling myself a lie.
When Monday descends
and our phone call ends,
I have the usual sinking feeling
when I cannot hear your voice;
how did I last after that week,
my emotions reaching a peak
when I never saw you again?
There was never a ‘next Saturday’
where I could take you aside,
there were no more other days,
I had stayed silent in love
and watched you pass me by.
Author notes
Contest Rule Compliance: "Help Me Feel Again"
The situation I was in 16 years ago. Been writing about it a lot lately, even though it's long gone and long in the past, just seems to keep coming up in contests with prompts that make it easy to write about.
A contest entry
- She was heartache from the moment that you met her. by Slinky-milinky.
1750 points, ended February 23, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Help Me Shed my Skin (PW welcome!) by TheDemonEve.
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AMAZING(:
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Great work here
Yes this is an awesome write and it so touched my heart .Never wait to tell someone how you feel no matter how big or small let it be known
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Oh!
Read the rules again, please, you forgot something.
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Oops, bugger...forgot to edit that into the AP. That's what I get for attempting to multitask lol
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WOW!
Impressive!!!! Your emotion is so full and raw and heart-breaking, and your command of words and flow is mind-blowing. BRAVO!!
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The rhyme in this was very smooth if maybe a little conventional but what grabbed me most was the message, I really loved feeling as if everyday was taken for granted, as if you always felt there would be time to sort things out and fix mistakes, but there wasn't. This rung very true and I was glad to see in your AN that it was based on really experience. The last stanza hit home really hard even though I knew what was coming. I really felt the emotion in this write. Well done and thank you for entering
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Aaaaaaaw Dangggg~
Oh My Word
this gets the eyes all swelled up
Beautiful piece again and tight rhyme~ also message tugs at the Heartstrings~ Loved how You weaved Your words so smooth~ though painful to inhale the story~ Bravo for telling it! Excellent take on the prompt~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes in the contest too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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WOW!!!! This is a great one from you here and I love it! Good luck in the coontest hon
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