This Moment

a veil has been drawn across my mind
all images and thoughts recede
I feel nothing ...

... a lie

desperation
deflation

my life in other hands
not in control
I ask, plead

my voice rides
on winds I never see or touch

drifting, lost among other voices
each different
as desperate as I

with no end in sight
no conclusion ...

...except the final

destiny

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Prompt. Write about how you feel ...now.

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right now. . . by JinSays. 1006 points, ended February 17, 11 entries
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karabi
February 22

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SUPERB
In a few words you have described how confused and bewildered one feels at the fag end of one's life. I ran it like a race. Why? At the time I had no clear idea. Now I seem to realise that it was all purposeless. Now there is only waiting in endless lonliness. For what I don't know.
deercatcher
February 17

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Oh yes. The ultimate fear. We had a small tornado come through. A pine fell on a house, crushing it a bit. The elderly owners came up from staying with the daughter. They had his and her matching walkers. He had been in the hospital; she didn't get out of the truck, but opened the door. I went over, and her lower leg looked like play doh. It was wrapped in bloody ace bandages to hold the bulges in. The place stunk of too many cats. The next job was an 85 year old man, who had to leave and visit his wife in the nursing home. Need more babies in my life to balance out.
Cerulean Sunrise
February 17
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A worthy winner. Be well.
JinSays
February 17

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I didnt see that you'd completed this, and I have to say, it was WELL WORTH THE WAIT.
Thanks always Sue, Love,
Jin
cricketjeff
February 17

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A cold dark place, but warm socks are on their way!

Keep banging the rocks together!

Great personal FV. Says it all I think

Jeff