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Sticks and stones

Sticks and stones may break my bones
But your lies will cease to hurt me
You think that you have finally won
But don't think I'll let you burn me

I'll sit and smile and make you think
I know nothing of what you do
But secretly I'll make you see
The last laugh will be on you

Sticks and stones may break my bones
But your deceit will hurt no more
You won't see me cry a single tear
As I watch you walk out that door

Don't think that you can go astray
And plan on coming back
I don't believe in forgiveness
I'd rather have a heart attack

My love for you has slowly died
I buried it today
I built a wall around my heart
To keep all men away

Sticks and stones may break my bones
But words can break much more
They can take your heart and leave the pieces
Shattered all over the floor

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  • abmsem
    April 27

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    This is amazing. It fit together so well and flowed beautifully. I love how true and to the point this poem is, with wonderful rhyming as well. I really love it. Thanks and good luck in my contest, you will be a finalist


  • T.o.r.t.u.r.e. gold member
    April 19

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    lot of emotion, mostly anger in here i like the poem alot. thanks for entering and good luck in the contest


  • Forgotten Anomaly
    February 23

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    How very angry, there was so much emotion in this. I love the last stanza, this has to be one of the best sticks n' stones spin off poems I've read (and oddly there are a lot of them). This is very good. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.


  • BonnieQ silver member
    February 13

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    Well Crafted, Angry

    This is very well written, strong in emotions, flows and rhymes very well. The only part that bothered me was the line about not forgiving; I suppose because I find it easy to forgive even the worst things, mainly because the other person's behaviour has nothing to do with me. This poem has the victim taking the perpetrator's unfaithfulness personally: it never is.

    There were two typos: decet/deceit; singel/single -- Nevertheless, this is a great poem that likely would garner the GOLD, were it in a contest.

    Much luv & hugs, BonnieQ