If,
in your memory
the thought of my touch
no longer reminds your
skin of me,
then throw me to the wind
so whatever is left of me
leaves your heart and
I will be mine
once more.
@ @
© Oisin
A contest entry
- where does the white go when the snow melts? by Nicolette.
1500 points, ended March 6, 31 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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We can never truly disregard our past loves, as they helped to make us who & what we are now. Lovely, my Friend. Thank you for your gentle words this day, Scribe. 
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A familiar message in such a unique penning and the flow was smooth as silk. A soft yet profound landing in the end. Lovely work! Absolutely my pleasure to read
~Tia
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i really like this one, especially the lines:
"no longer reminds your
skin of me"
denoting distance, the difference from the skin of you as a opposed to the substance of you juxtaposed with the sensual aspects of skin (nakedness, vulnerability)
very nice dichotomy
and beautifully written too
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You really are so good at writing short, succinct pieces of heart and soul, Scott and this one is no exception. I really liked this poem and the line "I will be mine once more" will stay with me - such a unique way of phrasing, yet so very effective and moving.
There is a wonderful sense of acceptance in this poem that comes with emotional maturity, but what really moved me was the gentle and gracious tones of this poem. Lovely poetry - thank you for this entry.
~ Nicolette
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I love this, espcially the second stanza. It's gentle, and yet accepting in the notion love fades and we must move on...be allowed to move on. I've read several entries, and I think Nicolette is going to have a hard time judging. Enjoyed!
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This is very gentle, and speaks of lost love without reproach. I like the thought of reclaiming the part of yourself that remains with a lover, maybe the final step in regaining yourself, and the ability to move on.
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i love this -- i love the idea of giving someone back to be their own. Sometimes, there is this gray area in love. We remain in parts of the other person, and not quite complete in ourselves. i love your voice, it's nice to read you again..best of luck
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it's not easy to throw someone to the wind especially when they're hiding inside of you.
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Incredible poetry, Nerudaesk, if you ask me! Beautiful~! Geo
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The imagery and soul of this gentle poem touches my heart. I think I shall remember these words for a long time. Very beautiful.
Az
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always gentle and gracious.
nice
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This is beautiful, and a bit sad. I love this.
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beautiful
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WOW!!! what a way to describe being emptied. truly AMAZING!!!
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