And I know,
I know I’ve had this feeling,
So many times before,
With death knocking at my door but I’m not home.
And I know,
You won’t pick up the phone,
And really there’s no reason…
But I’ll do - what I’ve always done.
It’s a long, long story,
-- a long, long one…
And it always ends,
With only one.
Without you--
Life just doesn’t pay,
And death doesn’t make sense…
I don’t know what I search for every day.
Now your gone,
And I’m waiting outside,
Looking in through your window,
Blank windows of your eyes.
And I know,
It was a perfect picture,
Or so It would seem,
But all your dreams of love,
Must stay just dreams.
And I know,
All the romantic plans,
That you and I would forge,
But didn’t expect to spend,
Our honeymoon-- In a morgue.
And that’s it you’re leaving,
I remember what you said,
But I’m the one left standing,
And you’re the one who’s dead.
You always said I’m crazy,
At the time I said “your wrong,”
But I hadn’t killed somebody,
In so long.
So I’m here,
Standing by your deathbed,
To say my last good bye,
To say that you’re the last one that I saw ,
--before I died.
And I know,
I know I’ve had this feeling,
So many times before,
With death knocking at my door, but I’m not home.
Author notes
It's more of a lyric song-poem
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This is a nice poem. It has a very saddening, surreal feel to it, almost dreamlike. The soft tones turn from loving, to sad, to an almost creepy tone. I especially loved the line "But I hadn’t killed somebody, in so long". It gives a suprising twist to the poem.
One thing I've noticed: in part of your poem, you used the word "your" incorrectly. For instance, the line "At the time I said your wrong" would become "At the time I said you're wrong".
I wish you the best of luck, and keep writing and improving your poetry. ^__^
Aeris Silverlight
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But all your dreams of love,
Must stay just dreams. ... unfortunately that is all too true.
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