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painless love

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i am a woman of credit and
money that was lookng for in all
the wrong places.

painless love is what i was looking
in past and know.
i feel the pain of lover that i once
had bite of ever lasting love that only
comes once in every-night.

the love that we shard was a special
love of the dark and life with in a light
to be held and wanted by all walks of life.

the first and last bite was done and over
with the love of my life. i wanted to be with
him and his world long as i could...

a simple woman with a simple plan turned
into a love with death and life as one.
i am in a painless love a love with out pain
of lost and loneliness and a pain with fear..

this is a painless love

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(A_Valentines_Passion_by_LamiaFemina)

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  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    March 14, 2009

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    Again a hard truth you have shown by the soft immages of the life bringing the fact around the aemotions..well done..


  • AnaelCathetelEcanus silver member
    March 3, 2009
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    Awesome take on the photo. Don't we all wish we could have a 'painless love.'


  • Angelflower
    February 22, 2009

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    this was a really interesting piece.. thank you very much for your entry.. best of luck in the contest.

    Angel


  • Callisto Athena gold member
    February 22, 2009

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    Very nice, great imagery, but I would go back and correct some spelling errors to make the flow better.. Your first stanza should be corrected to read: I was looking for LOVE in all the wrong places.. You don't show what it is you were looking for right now.. This lineainless love is what i was looking
    in past and know. I think should read: painless love is what I was looking FOR in past and present? I don't understand the way it is now.. I really love the idea behind it and think it could just use a bit of cleaning up with spelling and missing words..


  • trekkergirl
    February 21, 2009

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    very interesting. Good imagery. Lots of emotions expressed. A little stiff but then that may just be your style of writing. Not a complaint though. Just a thought. thanks for sharing this with us.

  • AnaelCathetelEcanus silver member
    February 14, 2009
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    Terrific piece. Great imagery and powerfully emotion filled words.

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