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Why Oh Why?

Trouble, trouble everywhere,
Why oh why can’t it disappear?
We want everyone to let us be,
Why oh why can’t they see?
Love for each other is what we have,
We just need to keep being brave.
Everyone just wants to push us part,
All they ever do is talk in a rush,
I want them to know how we feel in our hearts.
We just want to fly,
Like a dove,
Because we are so in love.
Trouble with people is that they don’t understand,
Everyone has freedom on this land.
Into my eyes,
He gave me a glance,
As we both held each other as we danced,
Everyone would like him,
If only they would give him a chance.
Why oh why can’t they learn?
How our hearts will never lose its burn.
Everyone has to know where our heart belong,
When they talk we will say so,
If they say leave we will say no.
People’s hearts can be so cold,
Why oh why are they so bold?
His love is what I will hold,
Until I am gray and old,
To everyone this I have told.
They want us to break up,
They say it’s for the best,
I just want them to take their mouth and put it to rest.
This is the case,
I love him,
I’ll always wake up to his face.
Why oh why can’t people just give in,
Because we have committed no sins.
Our love is unbreakable,
No matter how much they disagree,
And tries to make it able.
Why oh why can’t they just go?
And leave us be,
Maybe in time they will come around and see.
Our love was made,
By some special stars that shine on us above,
Like a rainbow stream,
Our eyes sparkled, it was no dream.
Or plains are to be married,
For he asked me to be his wife,
And it will be for the rest of my life.
This is the time I wish they would realize it’s good to gain,
Then it is to lose.
Our goal is to be happy with laughter,
Everyone seems to give us fears,
And makes me cry with tears,
I want them to stop here on after.

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  • This was very emotional. I liked the ending of your poem. You have a great start with your poems and pretty good finishes.. but your middle needs work. I think that it's just the flow of the words. You've got a 10 for this poem. So a total of 60 points thus far. Thanks for entering the contest and best of luck to you. kahy


  • Emotional-wreck
    February 17

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    This is the time I wish they would realize it’s good to gain,
    Then it is to lose.
    Our goal is to be happy with laughter,
    Everyone seems to give us fears,
    And makes me cry with tears,
    I want them to stop here on after.

    wow good poem and good luck!