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Untamed Melody

Coursing through my being
~ endless, so it seems ~
this rushing wind

    moves me to the core.

My body shakes, shivers,

    and sways uncontrollably...

With each passing gust

every limb quivers

    as I tremble in its unseen power.

Tossed about in its wake,
my soul resonates ~
stirring a beautifully unique melody

    from within...

Flowing effortlessly,

with no set rhythm or rhyme,
this song, born of my spirit,

    arises into the heavens...

Tranquil, gentle, calming,

     ...and as untamed as this rushing wind.

 

Author notes

POW Contest, 19 lines
Theme: A wind chime's melody when being tossed about during a tornado watch.
Link to a previous PO' Gold ~
"Reanimated Corpse" http://allpoetry.com/poem/4592375

Yes, this can also be taken spiritually

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  • Corinthians13-4
    May 20, 2009

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    The big font was a little... in your face, but all in all, you have a good sense of vocabulary and imagery. Well done.
    Erin


  • Denerica
    April 15, 2009
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    Oh,

    Thanks for entering...off to sweet dreams and visions, I work tonight.


  • Denerica
    April 15, 2009

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    Send the fire, wind and rain...the words just flowed and exuberant, I could feel my spirit begin to want that feeling of worship, awesome, seemed even spirit led to write. Blessings.


    • Xianaria gold member
      April 15, 2009
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      Thank you ~
      I used to be a worship leader, there are times when the Spirit just hits you.


  • the-gifted
    April 8, 2009
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    this is a good write. thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.


  • Day-Dreamer-10
    March 27, 2009

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    Brillitat write.
    I enjoed it. It
    kept my intrest.
    Good job
    Thanks for entering
    and good luck

  • the-gifted
    March 19, 2009
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    wow. very good write. good luck in the contest.


  • azlyn gold member
    March 15, 2009

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    Tim...this is simply beautiful. I felt so peaceful as I read this. Serene and gentle...loving and blessed with hope.

    Thank you for the entry.


    Sue


  • spirit rising
    March 5, 2009
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    this is absolutly beautifull!!

  • Xianaria gold member
    March 5, 2009
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    For LordCommanderThorn:
    Author: Xianaria


  • Darkwell
    February 17, 2009

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    wow i can see why this got gold it's totally killer im not good enough to win a gold in a POW yet but i can gold vicariously through you


  • Arkbear gold member
    February 16, 2009

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    Gold deserves a few more little yellow men


  • Skybow silver member
    February 15, 2009

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    Congratulations on this well deserved Gold. I love you poem, and was going to comment on it earlier but my day was crazy today and you won before I could.


  • Arkbear gold member
    February 15, 2009
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    Excellent show of talent and insight here Tim.....each L is penned wisely, and you chose your words ever so carefully -

     

    The beauty I found in this write is exceptional....and when I found out it was about wind chimes.....I thought....Hmmm...these other Poets are going to have to pen incredible entries to get past this" -

     

    I have nothing in a review to critique here...let's see what the board has to say.....good job Tim...God bless,

     

    Bear ~

     

    Title   9.45.....Had me pondering.....I would have clicked on it......maybe.....this genre of *melody* is not something which really peaks my interest -

    Flow  10....even with ( some ) punc.'s lacking, your word choice pressents and creates the Flow..I seem to be giving ( 10 's ) in Flow lately....2 in the last POW -

    Depth   10..perfect depth....brilliant penning -

    Theme  10....a perfect Theme ...penned with excellence -

    Feelings   9.95....the last L....hmmm....because of repeating....it only (slightly) took awayfrom the feelings I had built up -

    Grammar   10.0..wisely chosen.... VERY affective..had me glued to my monitor -

    Presentation   `10..GORGEOUS!!..For any S or G Members....this is how you create beauty with black on white.......the BOMB! -

    Uncommonness....10....I do not believe anyone else could pen this Theme as beautifully as you have just done.....should have saved this for the POM  -

    Sit & Ponder Affect  10.0...I did ponder....A LOT -

    Ability to follow Rules  10.0...perfect....nice job  -

    Bears Score:  99.4

    This will be hard to beat.....well done!

    No editing once......oh, you know

     

     


  • afroqban
    February 15, 2009
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    this is awesome, read great! The flow if this is sooo smooth. well done.

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    February 13, 2009

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    I think that this is a great write I love chimes also I agree with Jan love the last two verses good luck in the contest be well.


  • aboomer silver member
    February 13, 2009

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    I love windchimes - collect all types of them and even make my own sometimes.....so I much enjoyed this. Lovely! I especially liked your last 2 verses.
    best wishes in the contest.


  • islekine
    February 13, 2009

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    Nicely penned!

    Best wishes in the contest Tim!
    and always....write on!

    and


  • maralisa silver member
    February 12, 2009
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    a beautiful poem good luck in the contestmaralisa

  • Sunshine Princess
    February 12, 2009

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    I like windchimes my sister has some on her grave my mommy says it is how Angels speak. I like your poem have nice day Sir.

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